It's so loud

So many questions

As I drown 

In my regrets

I can't take back

The words I never said

I could hear your voice

Empty in the wind

Hoping you might be listening

Because I want you to know

It's loud in my head

With words I could've said

But I never did

And never saw you again

Never a connection

Never a word spoken

Even when they were there

You weren't

As I drown

In my regrets

I can't take back

The words I never said

Author's Note

It's always hard to deal with death. And however we get over it, is different. It's almost been a year since one of my friends at school died, we were in a play together, and he had the most amazing effect on the entire school district. Other schools were mourning for him after the fourteen year old boy died. And we all loved the cheerful boy who had so much ahead of him. So I've been thinking, what would happen, if I ever forgot him?

Reviews

[Austin Hucks]

This is might disappoint you a lot if you're not trying to quote the song for about half of your poem, but the phrases, "As I drown
In my regrets
I can't take back
The words I never said" and
"It's loud in my head
With words I could've said," have been used almost exactly in song, "Words I Never Said," by Lupe fiasco featuring Skyler grey. I'm guessing you did that subconsciously unless you've never heard the song before, but plagiarism's something you've gotta be really careful about, but it's easy to look out for. If you're ever got the feeling that what you're writing isn't original, you can just type it into a Google search and see what comes up. As a writer I know how nerve-wracking it is to find out about these sorts of things, and i feel even worse about saying this reading your author's note, but the song's really popular, so someone probably would tell you eventually, and the longer you're left unaware of this, the worse it would be when you find out.

[Astro]

Awesome write girl, and so completely human. The truth spoken in volumes but poetically condensed to form a really excellent poem. I know myself, that I have experienced this many times, perhaps on a daily basis and toeing the line of sanity because of the voices that speak words unsaid. Way to go Seimei.

[Rita L. Sev]

It's loud in my head
With words I could've said
But I never did
And never saw you again

This is full of wisdom, a lesson learned in tragedy - to never let those words build up until it is too late. Good write!

[Sami Khalil]

This sounded like a good sad song...Well done. I like the repetition at the end...:)

[Barbara Walker]

I love the intent of this piece! Many will identify with this one-the conversations we have inside our heads saying the words that we hesitate to say out loud. This is an excellent piece of work!