Fall

Oh look there you go again puting on that smile again;

even though i know you have had a bad day.

Doin this and doin that always putin yourself last;

a whole lot of givin and not enough take.

But you can only be strong so long before you break;

so fall go on and fall apart fall into these arms of mine.

I'll catch you every time you fall  go on and lose it all every doubt every fear;

every worrie every tear im right here baby fall.

Reviews

[KAREN]

Great poem! Loving poem too!

[Mikuru]

i love this :) it is very well writen. i find i can relate to it a little bit with what's going on in my life. thank you for writing such a good piece :)

[ariel-the-little-mermai..]

that it really cute i enjoyed reading it :)

[nothing]

This is so cute. I love it. It really made me smile. So, I will ask this..How did you come up with this? It looks like you put a lot of thought into it. I love it. Great work.

Sarah.

[Geralyn Miller]

So well written, a light touch with a poerfully emotional piece.
On the critical side, first line, putting, two "t"s. The flow would be improved with some punctuation. The easiest way to figure out where to put a comma, is to read it aloud.
"Oh look, there you go again, putting on that smile," (you don't need "again" twice in this line)
This is an exceptional poem, and deserves a little polish.

[Brad]

sometimes picking up their peices can be too much

[Lucid Smile]

wow. this remindes me of me, i always put myself last and sometimes i feel like falling but nobody is there to catch me.great job i loved it :)