The Setting Sun: Two Silhouettes

We have felt the power,
in all portrayed as weak. 
We have felt the sorrow, 
in what is remembered with a smile. 
We have felt difference, 

in all that remained the same. 
We have felt the absence,
among all that lays its claim.  

We have seen the clouds water,
turned to the foundation of solid structures. 
We have seen the end,
in all that was beginning. 
We have understood great character,  
in all that never was.  
 Yes we have seen great memories, 
as the mind glorifies the blur. 

Thank you for the moment, 
although the moments nearly gone. 
I do not await tomorrow,
for tomorrow was yesterdays song. 
Together we have chatted,  
although we have stood alone. 
Thank you for the moment,
Although the moments nearly gone. 

Reviews

[Julie Spade]

As I read your piece, i have this sense of rush which is a good thing because it shows how important it is to read between the lines! The overall flow is pretty good, having a rhyme scheme and all. The images within my head are in different forms as I read each sentence . Thank You so much for the request!

[Lyn Anderson]

A really nice write. Very strong patterns and visuals. Should moment's have apostrophes?

[Baby Ricochet]

Nothing lasts forever. That's for damn sure

[Cryingkate]

Baby. Question? How come they get to and no one else?

[Cryingkate]

Who You Ask? Well Damn and Sure.
How come that's for them? and no one else? :-)

[David Scott]

I like the play of opposites completing the circle in most of what we understand in this life.
a great philosophical position I think.

A little grammar help if I may...
When you mean to say a moment is then the word should look like "moment's" and the possessive of yesterday is "yesterday's" ... I do the same thing when I get lost in creativity. Feel free to correct me when I do it in my poetry. those dang apostrophes will get you every time. :)

Great thought and the structure works well to I think.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thanks :) this will help in my book!

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

A beautiful and profound poem, a philosophizing poem, a poem that speaks of the moments of moments ... that allows you to think about all the little special things around us... it felt like you had to say a real special "thank you" in this one... They were connected, they saw the sun, and waters, and "time" passed... memories stayed. Great flowing analogy. Such a fantastic piece my friend.

- Elisa

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

oh with words of grace this angel of clay woes :)

Oh and you have such a way with words :)

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you for sharing the moments and this wonderful write...:)...................

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

Thank you very much :)! I'll take that comment to heart!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:).............................