My Paradise

The very Earth beneath

shakes and trembles

At my feet

Horizons break

Desert meets Sky

There is no escape

From the domination

Always taking and creating

These rapes and shakes

To what end

My eyes dart and wander

Like a bird

Broken and lost

Searching for something familiar

In the land and the frost

The hint of a life lost

Cannot touch this realm

Standing amongst the numbers

I heard someone yell

Welcome to paradise 

the seventh ring of HELL

Author's Note

Violence is the Name of the seventh ring. This piece introduces something I survived but it is just an introduction. I have barely given you a slight view. It is however empowering for me to write about, remember and let go. The most amazing thing I left with the day I left the gate of Paradise was Strength. A Strength that surprised, enveloped and endured into the journey outside the gate. The second trip to Paradise was insanity I was taken back for 93 days. Those 93 days were harder than the three years I had just done. Why? Because a small taste of Freedom. That is when I wrote Freedom because nothing else mattered. Again the day came to leave the gate. I left with a strength I had never knew I contained. If your still reading Thank you for that and God Bless.

Sheer Terror

Reviews

[Ethan]

This is great, nice job. I like your creativity. :))

[danielle.]

I can really relate the way your rhymes flow & the way you space your lines, your poems are great to read & inpire such emotion. I got strong sense of a time of destitution, I hope it was empowering to write! Well shared x

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

Yes it has been empowering and I am working on writing more in depth on the subject. This experience will change you good, bad or both. Thank you for your review, God Bless

Sheer Terror

[Pete]

great write about a living hell. they say that what doesn't kill us makes us stronger but sometimes i wonder about that.

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

In the end Strength will bow to Wisdom. Pete, thank you for reading and reviewing I apreciate you.
God Bless

Ssherr Terror

[Michael S]

Really great, Sheer Kind :-)
What can one do without freedom..it is like living hell..Heart felt.
I like how you keep sharing your life pieces through your poems..
Courageous write

[Adam Adams]

quite interesting, & philosophically very intense. liked the way how you talked 'bout the brutality of this wicked world, & nicely spelled down your thoughts in heartfelt words. great job!

[wordman]

sounds like it would make a great book !

[HeyJadeXO]

I like how personal this piece is to the writer.It shows in your words.Great job

[SZHZIA]

As a poem It is good you have composed it in simple language. the second point is that you have done nice job to mention what happened to you clearly. well written.

Best
Szhzia

[Esther]

I think you did a really nice job on this. I enjoyed reading this-- you are a great writer. Keep up the good work.

[Mr. Lopez]

Your close, very very close. And oh so on the right track.ill admit that there's a little tweaking here and there that can be done but otherwise it was good.