You

This is about a guy I couldn't forgive for a long time. I finally have.

I
Thought I loved
You,
But in the end
I
Found it was not
You.
You
Were looking for satisfaction to
Your
Lust for sex, power, control,
And being but fourteen
I
Was never enough.
I
Wanted only
You
But of
Me,
You
asked so much.
And now, two years after
You
I have yet to have
A functional, fun
Normal relationship.
I
Am alone.

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Reviews

[Shelby]

I didn't isolate the I in line 2 because I wanted the first You to be more pronounced. When it was seperated, it was too stop and go and the You got lost. Line 24 was basically the same, except I wanted the last I to be pronounced, instead of the You.

[.shalynn.009.]

I like how you isolated all the I's and You's to emphasize how cut off the speaker is from the person addressed, how little they knew each other and how disconnected they were. Is there any reason you didn't isolate the I in lines 2 and 24?

[Moflo]

I like the set up of this poem...very unique, not like anything I've seen. Interesting work.