Crumbling soul

Crumbling soul

A Poem by Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of Poetry
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Soemthing that just came to mind

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Reality is a harsh reality

Does this make sense?

If this is true how could you word it?

But isn't reality what we don't choose to be?

So why would we choose to take a harsh turn

SHouldn't we be able to feel safe

In our own reality?

 

© 2011 Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of Poetry


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a series of serious questions in the confines of a poem... yeah, alright, i'll bite. the questions are good. the repeat of 'reality' less so. if the ideas behind your harsh realities were drawn out a little more, explained... maybe meant to flow a little better than just a drumroll of questions... this has great potential.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Nicely written, interesting questions. Although I would agree that maybe you should change the wording a little so that you're not repeating "reality" so much?

Posted 13 Years Ago


Love this one. Sounds like Molly :P

Posted 13 Years Ago


We have different reality, different from other people whatever that reality is.
Depending on how we take reality for what it is, we make the destiny in our own world.
Thanks for sharing your reality.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Alas! The answers to questions we may never know!
I like the way you worded your poem, it was simple, to the point, but most important you kept me thinking, that makes a good work, I think (:

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trying to find answers to many questions is difficult at time..!! What about sticking to just one..??

Good write..!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


a series of serious questions in the confines of a poem... yeah, alright, i'll bite. the questions are good. the repeat of 'reality' less so. if the ideas behind your harsh realities were drawn out a little more, explained... maybe meant to flow a little better than just a drumroll of questions... this has great potential.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I am Sherb of Sherbs Dreaming tree, Come inside and see, My marvellous range of tea. Haha Im Sherb I love poetry, it was my life for wuite a while and i have been suffering an 18 month block .. more..

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