Ode to Katub

Something i wrote before the break-up

I glare into your eyes

I feel like I'm gliding
with the birds in the skies.

Your smile radiates happiness 
in everyone who has but a dwindling
shadow of a soul.

You make me feel as though I'm flying 
high and weightless
looking down on your beauty.

Your skin as soft
as the finest silk
rich and flowing.

Your lips
as red as the finest wine
full and fruity.

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

this is beautiful, extraordinary, though the glare is a bit of an off-putter. i mean, i glare at boyfriend but only in jest, and i don't put it in poems because it makes it seem like your angry...? my only other suggestion is to remind you that commas are your friends, especially between words that describe one subject.

[♥Chloe-The-Zombi..]

a little cheesy, but its cute. i like it. its really different from the rest of your stuff.
fav line was:
"You make me feel as though I'm flying
high and weightless
looking down on your beauty."
very cute :) 99/100

[Kate Hunter]

nice job

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

Is cheesy though el juero haha

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Ahh, young love...smooth and sweet a s new baby. I really liked this...a little time travel for me. I still remember those feelings. Great poem.