Stay with me

I beg you,

Stay here,

Please be mine forever,

Take me in your arms until the end of time,

Those arms of love,

 

You leave and i feel the tears,

Well to my eyes,

 

if you choose to leave,

Then kill me,

If you will not,

Just,

Stay with me

Author's Note

I wrote this when i was crying about my ex coz i suck that much :/ so please review

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

You have a talent for making me think of girl punk bands singing your poems as lyrics except i am at a total loss with this poem. I am leaning to Lisa Loeb, but it also reminds me of Avril for some reason. Either way, awesome job, and in the words of every sassy black chick i ever met.

Girl you dont need no man all up in your business! You A strong woman girl!

they dont say that to me, its usually, 'wow M your the coolest kid in town" but thats rare.

[Maggie]

Dude, I felt the same way when I was getting over my ex. It's a perfect expression of pain. You get the feelings exactly.

[Jessica Marlow]

i love it, its exactly how i feel right now but im still crying

[sushi]

Awesome! Sadness struck me hard in your words.

"if you choose to leave,
Then kill me,
If you will not,
Just,
Stay with me"

Great job....

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

The sadness of the heart my friend.

[Short.Nerd]

Very good and very sad! Nice job!

[M.Babu]

Ahh very sad to be in heart ache friend.

"if you choose to leave,
Then kill me,
If you will not,
Just,
Stay with me"

Very well put this one is. Properly describes the desperation and pain. Nice bro

[LA Lorena]

no pain can compare to that of a heart breaking. well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

"if you choose to leave,
Then kill me,"
The above words are true. When love walk out the door. Death seem like a good place for a time. I like the emotion and the desire of this poem. A very strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tate Morgan]

i understand the feeling of emptiness I was hospitalized when i divorced i was so horrible