Near A Waking Dream

I had a dream last night and something miraculous and enchanting happened.

Near A Waking Dream
ShuiYun

Often I had met him
In my silent reverie
Which I chanced to smell his distraction
Call this Child of Music, memories seep.

Allurement murmurs, mumbles - and more and more...
He stops at the lust that shall reprove him.
And no youthful poets should now inspire
Through a heart with loosing vera cava.
Hold on to a waking dream.

Oh, mightily weak ardency!
This is not far from my waking dream I dreamt.
Fainter light of Harris who praises
The resplendence of a silvery kiss.

Author's Note

Give me some comments on my language.

Reviews

[Olatunbosun David-Rex]

really cool...your language is just fine

[Raven]

nice. i think you did good.keep up with the writing and you will get even better. :) please continue to write more.i can't wait to read more of your work.