First attempt with a fictional paragraph

The operating room moved in rhythmical precision to the beeps and hums of the machines that surrounded the patient on the operating table.  The surgeon, more to himself then to anyone in the room, was talking through the procedure he was there to perform.  He started asking questions in the same monotonous tone, receiving quick energetic responses in return.  Nodding his head in acceptance, he turned to the nurse near the patients head, indicating he was ready.  The nurse took hold of a breathing mask and fought to straighten out the attached tube.  With a motherly smile, she leaned over, “Ok dear, nice, deep breaths between each number.” She said gently, while placing the mask over the patients’ nose and mouth. “Can you count down from ten for me?”

 

I only remember getting to six….

 

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at putting something together that I would remotely call an attempt at novel writing. Please butcher it to your content and let me know what can be improved on.

Reviews

[Jules]

I think you are good with describing the scene without getting technical and without being t0o skimpy on the details.
Now! Time for chapter 2! :)

[Nick]

Thanks Jules, I appreciate the feedback!