The Story of a Runner and a Writer

A girl sprinter, and a boy novel writer

She was a 100-meter sprinter. When she set a new personal record, i was so ecstactic thay I could have been the one who ran.

I'm the president of the Literature club. I would watch her run along the track as I ran my pen along paper.

My work never got published, but she said. I was awesome anyway.

The first day we met at the park, I was so nervous that I couldn't say a word.
But the day has come that I confess my feelings for her. She did the same thing too.

It hurts, because she's going to transfer in other school. I regret it because, I didn't tell her how i feel as soon as we met.

I want to tell her that no matter how far apart we are, my feelings will never changed.

You're leaving to an unfamiliar town but I'll always Love You.
~
She was my first Girlfriend
I knew nothing, Iwas so nervous
How to kiss, how to hold hands
We'd never ewan told our friends
It was so embarrassing
I never had any idea what to do
But that day, i found the courage to tell her
I could believe we could always walk together.
~
To think someone i Loved, would Love me back
I thought it must have been a miracle

--The End--

Author's Note

Sorry, this is my first story, i cant think of anything, i hope you like it. Thank you for Reading.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

The second sentence has a typo... "thay"

3rd sentence... If you capitalize "literature" you must also capitalize "club"

4th sentence... Why is there a period after "she said"?

6th sentence is poorly worded... try... 'the day has come for me to confess...'

So many little errors continue in almost every single sentence, I'm not going to continue to list them. I can tell that you didn't do even a token proof read of this. Either you're lazy, don't care or have far too much confidence in your ability.

Also, the story itself has almost no setup, includes irrelevant details, and comes to a rather clichéd ending. For instance you're in a literature club and your grandma thinks your awesome but you've never been published... why are you telling us this? This is about your first girlfriend... your 'writing' or what your grandma thinks of it has no connection to the story other than to bluntly make the reader aware that you like to write.

If this was to be graded I'd give it an F-----------, unless your 11 years old, then it can just be a D-.