Stooped in loop

Stooped in loop

A Poem by Sindu

Stretching around the infinite loop
clambering to a definite stoop
you walk the line
thick and thin
An algorithm
Sinister bug.

Parading around cloaked like a tree
yet bears no fruit for thee
stripped of glamour
and glory
An illusion
Misdirection

Be more than you plan to be
see more than you plan to see
Debug the code encrypted 
drape yourself with the trick
risk the risk
just enough

Be thee; stoop the loop in this tree.

© 2015 Sindu


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Be more than you plan to be
see more than you plan to see
Debug the code encrypted.

Massage in it. Beautifully penned friend.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very deep, sad, and well thought out piece of work, that 3rd stanza,
really got my attention, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sindu

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot,James. Appreciate it :) great that it can move you.
Jamestown

9 Years Ago

U r welcome!
Being a programmer, I can totally relate to this one (in more than one way :P). This one is very deep and has a hint of sadness hidden within a maze of carefully chosen words.

The truth is :

boolean comeWhateverMay=true;
while(comeWhateverMay){
System.out.println("There is always hope");
}

Cheers. Loved the brevity here. Good job :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

No need to mention it :P
Sindu

9 Years Ago

Ok. I'll take it back then :) :P
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Too Late..
This one is deep. But seems like lately you are involved in so much of programming. May god save you. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sindu

9 Years Ago

I was more focused on infinity loop and then a bit on coding. But may be I should start programming .. read more
Interesting and thought provoking imagery

NOTES: "striped of glamour" (did you mean: "[stripped] of glamour")

Maybe the lines in the third stanza could be tailored to fit the flow and rhythm of the first two stanzas.

I suggest breaking the last line into a couplet"
"Be thee
stoop the loop in this this tree"

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sindu

9 Years Ago

Thank you Momzi for the suggestions. I couldn't get them as short so I put them as it is. I will try.. read more
MomzillaNC

9 Years Ago

yw :)
hahaha! it's funny, but there is a tinge of seriousness and philosophy in it. I love the way you have used the flow and have created an entrap loop.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sindu

9 Years Ago

I wrote it high spirits. Serious but goofy.. I was being a smarty pants :P
its amazing Sindu yet somehow has a cold feeling of emotions, although i like the encouragement to be more than you plan to be, we are always hopeful i think :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sindu

9 Years Ago

I wrote it in a sense of warmth. But I guess I was more focused on hope so yes, it is hot and cold. .. read more
R Smith

9 Years Ago

yes that's more what i was trying to say, guess i got pen tied lol, you explained it so well :)
Sindu

9 Years Ago

Hehe.. May be you need to recharge yourself.. With some photography, nature. And food maybe
It would find it very difficult to read this without finding the allusion to "developing". An unproductive loop is a common "mistake" although I'm not a developer so I couldn't get into the intricacies of it all but if I remember correctly there should be three condition for the loop to become endless:

A condition that won't terminate
One that can never be met
Or one that would go back to the beggining

So if--
Condition x not met
Then
Go again from...

I can't remember all the sequential gates....

The amazing thing in here, something so, let's say devoid of emotion is that you turned it into human behaviour. Not sure if to feel empahty for such good attempt or shake head in disbelief to acknowledge that we are more and more subject to becoming automatons.

Very createtive any which way.

Thank You

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sindu

9 Years Ago

I do not belong to that field of work either*
Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

I do I'm just not a developer per se....
Sindu

9 Years Ago

I'm a science person. I find it curious, software engineers- all included.

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Added on January 11, 2015
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