Lost love

A sad love poem...

The feelings, they all died away

Locked up inside my heart

The sight of you going away

Simply tears me apart

 

I can't bear this separation

Though I don't show

None can read my expression

Which is so cold

 

Ice cold hands of sorrow

Embrace me so tight

Feels like there's no tomorrow

Beyond this painful night

 

I wish I would wake up

From this nightmare

I hope I won't break up

I'm so alone and scared

 

I wish you could hug me

Tell me you'd never go

I wish you could kiss me

A kiss of love, passion and hope

 

I wish I could call you

Back with me to stay

I should've said, "I love you"

Before you went away...

Author's Note

Inspired by "Valentines Day" by Linkin Park. I love that song. It's so emotional...
About the poem, I hope you like it. I was thinking about removing the 2nd last verse, coz' I think it doesn't sound good. What do you say??

Reviews

[chloe cruz]

This is really, and I really mean this, this was wonderful! I think the second to last verse was excellent. I love the ending, you ended it perfectly. Great job, Siya! Don't change one bit of this poem, okay? And that song great!

I wish I could call you

Back with me to stay

I should've said, "I love you"

Before you went away...

[alternative_be]

No please do not take that stanza away!
This would break the flow of your poem, which is wonderful in it's simplicity and build up towards the end.
The fact that your love is unspoken is what makes your work different from being 'just another love poem'.

[*Kantola*]

I need to listen to that song, I guess!!

This was a wonderful poem, Siya. I've missed your writing!! (Absense sucks lol) I think the poem is wonderful as it is! When i started to read this, i thought, "Crap.... something happened". Nothing happened, right? lol

BEAUTIFUL job, Siya!!! :D

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

I love love love this piece!!! I love the 2nd last stanza it adds a nice touch!! U did great on this one don't change a thing!!
I love Valentines day by linkin park too by the way!!