Weight on my Shoulders

" The weight on my shoulders is heavy,

 it's pressing down on me hard.

 Don't know how much longer I can stand my ground,

 don't know when the weight is going to pull me down. 

I'll find my inner strength so I can remain standing tall,

 and that weight on my shoulders will not make me fall"

 

-Dreamer

Author's Note

Reviews are encouraged (:

Reviews

[smilempsn]

Ya ya.. I get it..
this mostly happens.. we carry so much of weight on our shoulders.. the weight that is not needed..
the weight that is not intended to give pain to our shoulders and mind..

Nicely wrtiten..

[BubblingMe]

Yes this is strong, this kind of poems is what I like to read, good job!

[Dreamer]

im glad you liked it

[koty bell]

Definitely agree with coyote...sometimes it's not so easy...life can suck alot...anyways great write

[Dreamer]

Thank you, Koty (:

[David]

This is very nice, I enjoyed it very much :P good job

[Dreamer]

Thank you very much, Ryan! :)

[MikeV]

Great write, this was inspiring. It reminded
me of, "eye of the tiger" :)

[Dreamer]

Thank you very much (:

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to be strong always. Life can create a heavy burden. A strong poem loaded with a lot of thoughts and emotion. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dreamer]

Thank you for the positive review! You're more than welcome!

[Patrick O'Neil]

I really like this. It short but still made me feel something. Hope. Great write.. never fall.

[Dreamer]

Thank you, I'm doing my best not to

[Jake Dyson]

Really nice piece, sort of thing I used to tell myself when I was feeling low. Thank you :)

[Dreamer]

You're welcome Jake, and thank you for reading it (:

[Sami Khalil]

A very powerful write. It has self realization as well as self confidence...Bravo

[Dreamer]

Thank you Sami, I appreciate you reading it and for your positive review

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Quiet Child]

this is a great piece, i absolutely love it! it's very inspirational. great job, keep it up! (:

[Dreamer]

Thanks I appreciate you reading it

[Quiet Child]

your welcome, i look forward to reviewing more of your work when i am able to.

[Dreamer]

That would be great, I look forward to reading more of your work too!

[Quiet Child]

Great! (: Happy writing!

[Dreamer]

right back at ya!

[Quiet Child]

thanks! (:

[Dreamer]

you're welcome! (: