-- wow... this piece is very intriguing for me... -- the most obvious question in my mind is about "small citadels of virtue/ wisdom and power" and whether the speaker in this poem loves human beings so much that he is saying that they are small citadels... -- the next question is about the last line... -- "when we sleep" for me is about the subconscious mind... -- the dream state... and this then ties to the first line... and makes me wonder if this was one of those lucid dreams that ended in a good way... or if the speaker is trying to sort things out by writing about the dream... -- i have a massive lucid dreaming problem... which rages like a forest fire from time and time... but most of them are nightmares... terribly nasty ones... -- unlike this piece, they don't leave me thinking about the human mind and its potential in a peaceful way...
p.s. the way you've written this piece is amazing... it teaches the reader how to write an allegory/extended metaphor... -- the use of the word "and" in line three is spectacular... -- it gives one an insight into how two apparently disconnected images (the melon and the boy) can be connected... -- so thank you for the poetry lesson...
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
thanks sereh....your interpretation is right on....i am plagued by lucid dreams night after night..... read morethanks sereh....your interpretation is right on....i am plagued by lucid dreams night after night....something i consumed?
-- the privilege is all mine, Maestro D. ... -- i'm going through a phase of lucid dreaming as well .. read more-- the privilege is all mine, Maestro D. ... -- i'm going through a phase of lucid dreaming as well these days... trying to break the pattern... at least in my case, it has nothing to do with what i've consumed... -- my problem is that i am an excruciatingly quiet person in the real world and i tend to internalize things that i should be expressing... that's why i try my best to write a lot... -- but i dunno if this is the case with you too...
-- are you excruciatingly quiet too, Maestro D. ? ...
7 Years Ago
.. painfully shy
7 Years Ago
-- oh, no... that could well be the problem... it's definitely so in my case...
This one especially fascinated me. I think it's the idea of melons as citadels of virtue like us. It hung around in my mind like small change you can never seem to spend. Impressive piece :)
I find this piece, while disturbing, quite uplifting. If memory serves correctly, penicillin was discovered in a mold that thrived on a rotten melon. A stirring piece, I think.
Posted 11 Years Ago
I like the metaphor, and unique shocking comparison. There is some truth in your words, at least there can be... creepy but interesting :D