Come back

All i want is for you to save me

From the darkness of my dreams

For you to come back from the dead

And say that you forgive me

 

I understand I did wrong

And it might be my fault that you're gone

But i beg you to come back

 

I beg you to at least haunt me

To make me remember your face

To make me remember how stupid i was

To make me remember the times i should

Have stopped you instead of letting you go.

 

 

Author's Note

Yeah any ideas?

Reviews

[Persona]

Spelling issues and the entire poem you are telling and revealing everything yet it is broad and generalised. Think of a specific situation and write of that

[kublakhan27]

I can't settle on one particular interpretation, but I strongly detect elements of loss and guilt that seem to feed off each other...a haunting piece, nicely done.

[Ees]

Nice.
Did you mean "hunt" or "haunt" in the 5th line from the last? It could work either way, so I wasn't sure. I read it as "haunt" and think I like that better and think that "hunt" could have been a typo?
Anyway, I like this. I think it's a great poem and I don't think that it needs any work.
Great job!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

The language used is simple and straight to the point. The repetiton enable its sound and musicality. I appreciate the poem's tree stanza and free verse. Thanks.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a sad poem. Hard to seek forgiveness when two people are separated. I like the desire to make amends and wishes for a better ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote