Escaping The Feeling

Escaping The Feeling

A Poem by Dom

She lays on the bed, staring up at the ceiling.

She's depressed and can't get rid of the feeling.

The feeling of loneliness and despair.

She says out loud " Does anyone care ? "

 

She gets out of bed then she shuts her door.

She's tired of everything. She can't handle it anymore.

She says to herself " How do I want to die? "

She kneels on the carpet then starts to cry.

 

She pulls out a box from under her bed.

There's a gun that sits next to a box of lead.

She takes the items and places them next to her.

Nobody would know why this incident occured.

 

She sticks a bullet inside of the gun.

She thinks to herself " I've had it. I'm done. "

She puts the gun up next to her head.

Once the trigger is pulled, she'll be dead.

 

She hesitates for awhile at first.

Her heart beats so fast she fears it'll burst.

She drops the gun and it lands on the carpet.

She decides that she can't go through with it.

 

She goes to the bathroom and then she returns.

She's been crying so much that her lungs start to burn.

In her hand she's holding a knife.

She finally decides that she's going to take her life.

 

She puts the blade to her arm.

She has an intent to do harm.

Blood pours out of the gashes.

She continues to make slashes.

 

The wounds are very deep.

She continues to weep.

Blood pools on the floor.

It's because of the veins she tore.

 

She stops slitting her wrists.

Blood drips from her clenched fists.

She lays on the bed, staring up at the ceiling.

She has escaped that dreadful feeling.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2010 Dom


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Great portrayal of a person encased in loneliness, insecurity and desperation. It shows just how fragile people can be, and what situations suicidal people undergo right before they commit themselves to death. The phrasing of words add color and life to this dark and gloomy piece.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 13 Years Ago


Oh your poem caused me to wince. Very graphic and moving. Superb work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Loved it.. It was very deep. Keep it up..

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow This reminds me of that song everybodys fool by Evanecence...Great Work

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ah My God!

This is so good! Really gripping, with amazing flow. This has to be my favourite of yours so far. The message is very compelling, and you communicate it so strongly!

"She's been crying so much that her lungs start to burn."- champion line.

Simply amazing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


it's sad to see anyone go through depression like this. very powerful piece... your ink is amazing as always

Posted 13 Years Ago


Deep. Profound poem right here. Good, eloquent descritption, good flow, nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on May 4, 2010
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Pittsburgh, PA



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