If I only had Love

If I only had Love

A Poem by SmittyJas
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Love in my life

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If I only had Love in my life
would thing be better the best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked in you eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small little shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispare would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder sweeter I meet her somewhere in between
I would show her I have a heart I want to share
And the promises I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the whole in my heart
A woman A woman a kind and gentle loving woman a joy in my life

© 2014 SmittyJas


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Needs a little clarity with this one...but the meaning can be translated as I read your verse...I would go and change this --- and put the right touch in the way you wanted it to affect the reader:

If I only had Love in my life
would thing be better the best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked in you eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small little shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispare would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder sweeter I meet her somewhere in between
I would show her I have a heart I want to share
And the promises I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the whole in my heart
A woman A woman a kind and gentle loving woman a joy in my life
---
If I only had love in my life
would things be better than best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked into your eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispair would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder, sweeter, and meet her somewhere in between
I would show her, I have a heart, and I want to share
And the promises, I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the hole in my heart
A woman, kind and gentle loving woman is a joy in my life
---

as you can see the clarity of this in the first one...needed some help...
to get the focus for the reader...
as the second one adds clarity and more refine...


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Needs a little clarity with this one...but the meaning can be translated as I read your verse...I would go and change this --- and put the right touch in the way you wanted it to affect the reader:

If I only had Love in my life
would thing be better the best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked in you eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small little shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispare would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder sweeter I meet her somewhere in between
I would show her I have a heart I want to share
And the promises I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the whole in my heart
A woman A woman a kind and gentle loving woman a joy in my life
---
If I only had love in my life
would things be better than best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked into your eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispair would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder, sweeter, and meet her somewhere in between
I would show her, I have a heart, and I want to share
And the promises, I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the hole in my heart
A woman, kind and gentle loving woman is a joy in my life
---

as you can see the clarity of this in the first one...needed some help...
to get the focus for the reader...
as the second one adds clarity and more refine...


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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SmittyJas
SmittyJas

Pittsburgh, PA



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