The Sculptor

Exposure

 

Sunshine so shrewd

in your lulling preparation

 

Sunlight so stealth

in your numbing warmth

 

Sunbeam so slicing

in your unforeseen penetration

 

Shadow so susceptible

to your glistening blade

Reviews

I loved the initial choice of colors, it took me back when it came to form. Mixing visual with poetry is a wonderful plus.

Good form, good choice of words, wonderful concept, well imparted message.

I wish to read your longer pieces.

Perhaps you can do the same with perhaps Flame (using similar colors, but a little more stanzas, Different shades of gray (each defining the gravity of a situation), The Human Touch (using different colors related to different parts of the body, blue eyes, etc and the romantic story or description behind). Your concept plays an amazing array of possibilities.

A very good piece.

[Leah Simone]

I picture the making of a great sword - perhaps even excalibur - I like the colors as if they are cooling as well.

[Dempsey Wilson (D.L. Wi..]

Whoa! Powerful stuff. You have a gift for writing poetry. Thank you so much for sharing your work with everyone here. It's a pleasure to read! Again, nicely done!

[Lena M. P.]

Very imaginative. Liked the use of color and colorful description. Enjoyed it very much.

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This is a wonderful exploration of a few simple words.

[HoorayForUnderdog]

Love the font and color scheme...really adds to the whole effect...also nice how well-balanced it is! I can learn alot from you :)

[J. James Reider]

aha! I hate short poems, they're difficult to review... lol

You left this wide open for interpretation. I see four brothers hidden in metaphor. Three "do gooders" and one black sheep. That is after alot of thought and mind bending, but it works. What? You know I am far from ordinary (:

I love how you illuminated the first word to every line. May I suggest using a bold font for shadow?

Your alliteration in every other line is brilliant. Never becoming stale because each word is different.

This brings me to your imagery which is crisp and clear. I can almost taste you words, like a Sprite on a hot summer day. That reminds me, I am thirsty! Nicely done, my friend!

[Ron B]

I really like this and the contrast is excellent.