Self Humiliation

Just random thoughts though experienced!

It hurts, it actually does,
the enviable opines thy mind ushers!
Blaze of attacks, creating bottlenecks,
Pessimistic , wishing Jesus back!

The hollow pit of depression
Turning thoughts into compression ,
Excruciating ,
An emergency for appreciation!

Cycle of sorrow and self harry,
Carry paddles of crypted merry !
Perplexed , not flimsy though,
Seeking fortitude and guidance, thorough!!

Still catching the art of maturity,
And blow out the s**t of mendacity!
The new me will be back soon!
Till then look up and wait for the new moon!!

Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

lovely pain, open heart, wisdom withstands, rebirth revivifies.


Oh, to the trials
whilst time meanders
whirlpools eclipse
wishes from lips

where is the breeze
wiping the dust
from our cracks
as we continue

however, first
the chrysalis
must be
shedd

[Sneh]

Admiring your ability to play with words ...Thanks heartily for the read and review!

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

I got into minimalism for a while. That means take out stuff like: the,and,etc. Say it in as few words as possible. Pretty soon, it became a nonsensical list of words. Still, less is better, as long as it gets the meaning across. I do love playing with words. Like lego, we are only bound by imagination and attention to detail. You Sneh are well on your way to greatness. It is only natural the some will be jealous and give us a hard time. When we trip over our own feet, people will laugh. These are lessons we remember and they make us humble. Our muse refuses to be second.

[Sneh]

Indeed less is good. Plethora of lessons we all have learnt and still the process is on...
Very encouraging!! I seek such stimulus, hope this full fledged support will resist for long.. :)
Good day/night! 🌸

[barleygirl]

Back in my younger days, being bipolar was more pronounced for me & this is what it felt like. My mind would be flailing thru the ups & downs coming at me, hour by hour. It can actually hurt to have a mood so intensely attacking oneself. This poem has many exclamation points! Usually I'm not into over-use of the exclamation point, but in this case, it works. It does feel like everything you try to focus on is coming at you with an exclamation point. This poem feels scattered & bumpy, which resembles the very feelings you convey. Yet, I love how the ending shows us we can still strike a pose of victory, after the bumpy ride, there's always a new moon! I have always loved that symbol, the new moon, as a "starting over" . . . sometimes we need to start over & over & over -- just like the moon! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[KWP]

I love the last line - I am a moon watcher, in all the crescent and full forms.

I like the self expression here - I would live to see you change the first lines each stanza into a metaphor instead of spelling it out for the reader - I feel if you do that you will add a whole new dimension to this already wonderful piece. How can you say 'hollow pit of depression' without actually saying it?

Great stuff X

[Sneh]

Thanks much for the suggestion and thoughtful review! I'll try best to refine things... Have a great day! :))
Sneh

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

We go through different stages losing ourselves needing to find ourselves again all part of the journey wishing at times we had the answers but we go on in faith and trust the process- interesting write- wishing u all things merry and bright🌹

[Sneh]

All we need is freedom on interval basis from this world to dive within, that's what we call 'Introspection'.
I stand by your words and an applause!! Thanks Miss. Kelly !
Wishing you a bright and joyous life ahead.. ❤

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Lots of words of introspection there Sneh. You’re very good at expressing your feelings. I relate very much.

[Sneh]

Extending my Heartfelt gratitude :)🌸

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You’re most welcome:)

[Onlyme]

Nicely expressed, deep, emotional and powerful eloquently put. Hope this new moon will do us all good. Hugs. Dawn.

[Sneh]

Yay, Let's hope.. :)
Thanks much for giving time!❤

[wordman]

rising in the moon,we look for you every night

[Sneh]

Thanks Wordman for your sweet words..have a good day/night!! :)

[wordman]

you`re welcome