Mirror

Like holding up a mirror so I can see my own reflection

Like a soldier in battle who suddenly gets a limb sliced off

Like a gun shot wound to an unsuspecting pedestrian

Like a gun shot going off too early at a horse race

Like a sword that pierces through to the other side, out a fleshy back.

Like a headless body that twitches in the final seconds before inanimation

Like you,

Like me.  

Reviews

[Alessander]

I like the anaphora. The different imagery when contrasted against each other jolts the reader a bit, which is a good thing.

I like how it ends too. Natural sense for how to end a poem without being formulaic. Poignant.

Nice job.

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Reflections are something when people pay mind I think you did a wonderful job and ended it quite nicely, Sometimes more says more than it needs. You write for you nothing more nothing less, that's what makes a great success:) Allow you words to be the light to guide it all upon a bright, let them flow to a feverish wind, when spoke they rise up from within. Words should always be in a linger of breeze they find their own way home:) I look forward to reading more of your writes:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Good flow of thoughts. You left a open door for more. I like the use of repetition. Kept the reader involved in the statements. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote