Ghost of a suicidal atheist

Ghost of a suicidal atheist

A Poem by Somebrownnerd

Traditional knowledge eludes you.
Harboring woe, as a jealous jewel;
Entrenched in greed,
though it keeps you among us,
you're no longer with us.

As Christ walked water, so do you;
taking each bemoaning step,
the surface rippling from your actions.
Viewing in hopelessness, the transparently teaming life below you,
praying something will drag you under.

That eternal environment consumes your logic,
standing at the brim where emotions meet thought.
Don't tug at those thread ridden wrists,
you will fight the answers that seep out.

Where are you?
Why are you here?
Who are you?

Laying upon sheets of ruby red.
Malefic actions.
Jane - Your dead.



© 2012 Somebrownnerd


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Damn, that last line is like the gunshot that killed her!
Great write!

It should be "you're" instead of your for that line, though, hope that helps!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I'm impressed! This is interesting and well sorted out. I especially liked, "don't tug at those thread ridden wrists, you will fight the answers that seep out."

Posted 8 Years Ago


Somebrownnerd

8 Years Ago

Thank you, for the review. I' am glad you liked those particular lines!
Suicide poetry is always a downer, this is interesting since you could be talking about any topic really, i read it as truth is Jane. That's where my head went, I'm sure your intentions were quite different, but it's out of your hands now, and in my head. It's unusual and suspect, that must be why I like it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Somebrownnerd

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Frieda. It can definitely be interpreted in many ways. I was wanting to focus .. read more
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

I lost my sister to suicide, possibly the reason I found a way around the interpretation. It was st.. read more
Dark and well sorted out... with a building content. I liked the last line.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Somebrownnerd

8 Years Ago

Thank you Chris, its nice have you drop in again. Again thank you for the read.
I'm impressed ;-) Just wanted to drop in and have a browse...I like what I see. Thanks for sharing your work with us.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Somebrownnerd

8 Years Ago

Thanks for dropping by! I'm glad you enjoyed my little page.
KAOlmsted

8 Years Ago

My pleasure. I'll be sure to drop by more often.

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Added on September 28, 2012
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