Your Venom

Your sunset is black, like the horizon I once looked forward to

Disturbing and slick with the voices of leaches like you

Your promises were covered lies, none of which I had wanted

The only thing true, the number of dreams your face haunted

You’re soulless and corrupted, unmatched in fear alone

And you took what I had left, what I had made my own

My will was broken when you finally brought a friend

And still, I hold my head high because you lost in the end

Your venom chokes what sanity I’ve so desperately managed to keep

You’re a crack in my mind; not a night when I can sleep

But there is one thing you have given me, this is unbidden

I have stories to tell, horrors that must be written.

Author's Note

It probably doesn't end well, but I don't give a shit. It's out, done, I'll edit it later on tomorrow, if I get the chance. Leave a review, they'll be returned (as always).

"There was no pain. No fear, no doubt, till they pulled me out, of heaven. So that's my refrain- I live in hell, cause I've been expelled from heaven." ~ Buffy the Vampire Slayer

By the way, I wrote this to get rid of some anger (and while listening to the metal version of One Winged Angel) so...enjoy. I guess.

Reviews

[Bard Constantine]

Actually the ending is quite cool, making this almost a prologue of sorts. Nice job of expression, keep writing...

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

This is a great unleashing! it makes me feel better reading this, especially your ending which is great!

[TAO]

First off... If you're talking about Sephiroth's Theme from FFVII... Hell yeah. I might have to find that one.

Second, what better way to relieve anger than to write it out? It's the one thing that's prevented me from knocking somebody off, and potentially doing away with my own self...so by all means, continue to write out your anger.

Third... What a piece this is... The anger is palpable. When you use "you" and "you're", I do feel like you're talking to me, which your words added power and weight.

Why edit? It's great.

[Drakana Wind]

I really like this. At first I had trouble finding the rhythm because the lines are longer than what I'm used to, but once I went back and reread it, I got it. I think that you did well with the rhyme scheme, and I really like the imagery.