The Only

 

Falling silent, falling still

Is our world growing chill?

 

Darkness smothers the last of Light

Here the remnant Noble fight-

 

Blade against blade, man duels man

Here are the Fallen, overran-

 

All are the Fallen, All are the Chill

Forever silenced, eternally still-

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

Very interesting write. Painting this scene of a battle taking place where there can be no winner. For in the end both must face the fact of there actions. One dies the other must live with that fact of having blood on their hands. Your words very flowing and impactful. I rather enjoyed this piece.


Great Job!!!!

[Neet]

Short and to the point, yet very deep. An enjoyable read.

[Brette Medb]

I liked the ending line the most, I'm not quite sure why, I just liked the way it sounded in comparison to the rest of the poem. It was different and it left me feeling a little conflicted. Nice work.


Brette

[Gypsy Willow]

Hmm... I feel as if I have heard this before... But I left no review, so I couldn't have read it before... I enjoy the truth in this one. Good job Doug.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I agree with Emily! Loved the brevity of this and the rhyme. Good poetry!

[Lydia Shutter]

A bit of a doomsday scenario here.

"Darkness smothers the last of Light
Here the remnant Noble fight-"

But are they noble...the ones who fight? Thought provoking. Good rhyming in this one. Lydia

[TL Boehm]

yes, it has an apocalyptic flavor to it. Well done. well done

[Chantal-lise Mirman]

This is well-executed (pun intended) and rather grim. The heavy meter and relentles rhyme (even forced in the third stanza, where we would have expected overrun) gives this the feel and sound of a death knell. The Light and the Fallen have biblical connotations, but this poem has a much further reach.

"Ask not for whom the bell tolls..."

[Angelheaded Hipster]

For every action, there is a direct reaction. Live, die, love, loss, war, peace, etc. You summed it up nicely...
Silence....I like silence. Gives me time to think. It's also rather nice to just sit and not rot out the mind.....

[Alex]

yep end of days ...I wonder how real silence sounds we as humans make so much noise ,terra must be deaf by now ...good write :)

[Dezaraye]

This can be so many different things and I love that you left it up to the reader to decide what it means to them. Very well done.