like rain

I might have been lying just then

when I told you “I am like rain”

I am more like a burning blade

that tare every heart to slivers

no matter how rigidly I try to love you

I will always be a liar

and as I cut

you keep breaking

under the gentle touch of my betrayal

Reviews

[Allan Eddings]

Bravo! A haunting piece. The choice of simple and not superfluous words lend it the finality of veracity. The structure, clipped and short, like something that is said cuttingly to someone's back as they leave. I sincerely applaud you, this is a wonderful poem.

I will definitely be looking at the rest of your work now.

Thank you and keep writing,
A.E.

[Scarlet Letter]

I just have to say that I love this. You can just feel the raw emotion seeping through every sentence.

[Secret Lullaby]

wow this is really good but a lil sad...I like it
and i can totally relate to it..so could a lot of other people.
cant wait to see your next poem

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, this is so honest and to the point :)
I think you did an excellent job and hopes to hear more from you.
Your friend, Ashley ;)