Too sweet

Made of Pink-

Spun sugar, sweet cream,

And Gold dust.

But your eyes shone

Too bright

Your smile, white,

And too wide.

Reviews

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This would make an awesome little scene to use as the start and end of a horror piece. The progression through the images from sweet and fluffy through to that creepy grin is great.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I get the cotton candy vibe, but at the end, its almost scary with the wide grin. Maybe its just me, but wide grins are my nightmare fuel. This is what they sell in the Carnival, to creep kids out, isn't it? ;)

[Mauricio Montoya]

nice work.

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nicely done. like this

[cfix]

Wonderful write