Journey to Hopes End

Speaks for it's self I think

Time smashed,

Life crashed,

Hell born,

Heart torn,

Head messed,

Razor best,

Blood drained,

No pain,

Death arrives,

Black cloak and scythe,

Ripped soul,

Death bells toll,

In wooden box,

Body rots,

Maggots bore,

I am no more

Author's Note

Please give honest comments otherwise how will I improve?

Reviews

[samantha munning]

all i can say is wow. very well detailed in not many words. i like it a lot. i love how you write bout death. its like the acceptance everyone needs to have.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Interesting. I liked it. =) it's melancholy.. hmm.. to improve.. well, I could suggest that you could use different words for your choice of describing death.. you could try metaphors? Hmmm or create more emotional feelings regarding death?? but i like this poem as it is in my opinion..
But I just said all that because you wanted sugestions for improvement. >.< I hoped i helped..

Nice write! ^o^