Blur

It's all just starting to blur together /:

I lay my head to sleep,
But open my eyes to the night,
I stare at empty walls,
From dusk till early light,
Wake up and go to school,
It's all just a blur,
Sometimes I don't even know,
Who I am anymore.
I b***h and snipe,
All angry and mean,
I don't mean to be,
Things are not what they seem.
Sometimes I start to cry,
From thoughts filled with doubt.
Does he really love me?
I'm not sure I can be without.
So I lay my head down to sleep,
And try to dream the pain away.
How much longer can I survive,
Always caught up in the fray?
I guess I'll just have to wait,
See if time will tell,
For now I gotta stay,
Right here in this personal hell.

Author's Note

Reviews are very greatly appreciated

Reviews

[anxia]

I like this poem damn very much because i can relate to it. In my case its not love but i am so frustrated in the search of who i am. Very well voiced.

[Cookie]

Oh my goodness this poem is amazing.This poem is so emotional some how...and I like it!
Keep up the good work.

[InsanityWriter]

This speaks so clearly. Amazingly written, I can feel your emotions clearly. (:

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem, life can kick us until we're down, a great write

[CreativeStroke]

We all have moments in life where we feel like this and I think you captured it very well!

[de_maruf]

hmm

[KeeD]

Blehhh! life sucks sometimes~ but kudos on creating something emotional and real out of a bad situation. Pain is a powerful driving force for creativity and you've used it's tools really well. Great job, love to read your work.

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Some of your word choice is a little bland and static, but you have a good concept and you use some good imagery in this. There's still areas that could be improved (and don't forget you don't have to cap every line) but this is a good start.

[Amanda]

I know I don't have to cap every line, but it was written on an iPad so theres not much choice lol but thank you forthe review

[The Girl with the smile]

This is a very powerful poem! I think we all feel like this sometimes. You did a great job of capturing those feelings. Nice write!

[Amanda]

thank you! :)

[Amanda]

thank you! :)