I'll Take This Piece.

 

The way you smell wanes
like the post-love pulse
and heat falls short of reaching me
like the tips of your unfettered fingers.
My own hands; vigorous,

flicking ears and pinching pallid skin just to feel

something.

So I went away...   

but you
and your feckless kiss
wrestle here against devout ribs
rattling, wind against my glass pane,
This beautiful blight on weathered lips
remains the best breath I ever heeded.   

Time slips,
the immortal theif-
It cannot be true.
You are all around me,

still; the background.

 

I went away...

on bold heels, unhinged
but have traveled nowhere

and learned nothing but to yearn

unbound.

 

Reviews

[Emily B]

oh, the yearning :)

perfectly written

[MarkGMelvin]

wow

[Cool Handless Luke]

Very nicely written. I like how you express the heartbreak it seems here to me that you have rendered upon yourself?

[Rochelle Tyler]

I really do enjoy a writer who is not afraid to expand on English vocabulary. You find creative ways to write out your thoughts without using common words, which is wonderful :) Great write.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Again your creative way of expressing heartache and disappointment is extraordinary... I am left jaw dropped open after reading this.

[An owl on the moon]

You writing is profoundly moving, gripping deep in the mind through powerful bites of emotive expressions. Amazing how you make one feel reading through your words. Simply brilliant!

[The Flawed]

This is different to your other work that I have read,
It somehow seems much more personal,
But hay, what do I know?
I like it, well done.