The Raining Window

By then we had a windowed hut

on the banks of the rediscovered river.

You were sitting on the window side.

I was lying down and looking at the

dripping roof.

‘Hey come and see…

It is violently raining’

I too came to the window.

‘I agree that it is raining heavily,

but it is not violent’

‘You remember last evening’s drizzling?’

‘Yeah…’

‘How tender it was!

We could even see the ripples it made in the river.

You too had a drizzle like voice at that time,

Wasn’t that beautiful than this violent rain?’

‘That’s when you compare.

There are only good things in this world.

Nothing is better than the other’

‘Don’t be so philosophical’

‘I am not’

‘Then tell me… What do you think about me?’

‘You are beyond these good and better.

You are THE incomparable’

‘That’s a perfect lie, ha?’

‘No it’s a truth’

‘Oh?’

‘Yeah but genetically modified.

:-)

I am sure you do remember that

half bitten apple?’

,..

Post Script:

‘By the way, why did not you reveal

what happened to that apple?’

‘Simple… I ate it'

Reviews

[idiotproof--1]

you should probably try to state who is speaking at some points in this poem. other wise it's very good poem thank you for sharing

[Eve Ola]

‘Simple… I ate it' :D watching ripples i love all the time but how you relate it your love i like it "We could even see the ripples it made in the river.
You too had a drizzle like voice at that time,
drizzling dipping soaking i just know when it comes for rain.. well done swaroop

[Swaroop Manikandan]

rain again :-)

[Eve Ola]

send my way ;)

[audrie]

There's nothing more natural than seeing only the good in your lover even when you know deep sown inside that there exists the not so good also. This is a lovely tribute to true love

[Swaroop Manikandan]

thanks Audrie...

[audrie]

you're welcome!

[Gurleen Saluja]

a beautiful piece.. Conversational form enhanced the read.. The end was simply wow :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Thanks dear friend...

[Gurleen Saluja]

You are welcome :)

[Frozen Eyes]

conclusion with the forbidden fruit awesome!
truly there's always a fight between better and best and worse n worst.. comparison never ends..
Ur piece "inspires not to compare" :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Thanks dear Eyes...

[Namrata]

Once again, a beautiful conversation.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Yup :-) . . . hope you liked it...

[Namrata]

Sure I did.

[Sophy Freebirds]

This new form of poem with conversation is a nice one..i liked the way you expressed the friendly banter between this couple... the flow is spontaneous... A good one. :)

~Sophy

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Thanks dear friend...

[Matching Socks]

I love your sense of humour, wit and wisdom.
I'd add you to my favorites but you're already there.
You have such a way with capturing these slow easy banters, between lovers, friends...
Nice one here again.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Thanks dear... that was really warm...

[Wynter Page]

This is quaint and it brings a smile to my face, especially the last part. I like how you set-up the poem with mostly dialogue, I can almost hear voices speaking them.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

and one of those voices may be even yours :-)

[Wynter Page]

very true, very true indeed :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

. . . :-) . . .