Despite the torture

Despite the pain
Despite the fear
Despite the things I said
Despite the things I did
Despite the things you said
Despite the things you did
Despite the ache
Despite how my heart sank
Despite how my life crumbled
Despite the constant ringing
Despite the tears tasted
Despite the months
Despite the weeks
Despite the days
Despite the hours
Despite the minuets
Despite the seconds
Despite all the time wasted
Despite the lies
Despite how I fell for them
Despite how it changed me
Despite how it phased me
Despite how it struck me
Despite how it fucked me
Despite all these things
My heart still rings, my love still grows, my heart still aches for you to be close, the tears still pay visits, the fears constantly grow, I secretly love, and will forever hold our memories close.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[SoberBunny]

I liked the flow of this poem, though I will admit I read only the last half of the lines. I feel that maybe if you put 'despite' every other like five lines, it wouldn't be nearly so repetitive as other readers mentioned. :) Beautiful wording and the emotion was profound. Definitely would make a good song and reveals the pain of life and love perfectly. Nice work!

[Nightfeather]

Despite all the negative things that live threw at you, your path to hope has never been blocked for love was your guide. Love can be a universal repairer of everything that is mentally broken (being bullied, tormented, etc.). I like the way you use the word 'despite' but like Mia Kane said, it becomes too repetitive. If you don't remove some lines or rewrite them, the focus of the reader will become unsteady and there thoughts will wander off, resulting in not understanding or skipping your poem but your poem is still really beautiful and you have talent.

Good job :D

[Eternal Devotion]

I liked the emotion you put into this, I must say that although i understand the build up you are trying to create it does get a little too repetitive. Maybe ever few lines you could put a completely different line in, just to break it up (: