On Blood, Water, and Other Fluids of Varying Density

Blood is thicker than water

So they say

But so is jam, and honey,

And mercury, and porridge, and-

Let’s just say a lot of things

Are thicker than water.

 

Blood is thicker than water

So they say

But there’s ‘a friend who sticks closer than a brother’-

So is that a ‘water’ or a ‘blood’,

Or a watered-down ‘blood’

Or a bloodied-up ‘water’?

 

There are many kinds of friends-

Depending on their circulations-

Indeed, some are so thick

They need nuclear-powered hearts

Just to pump all that tar

To all parts of their bodies

Women of steel and iron men…

 

So when you turn around,

And your friend has ‘got your back’;

Then you wind up with six inches of dagger

Sticking from it-

Don’t worry; it’s perfectly explainable-

They just wanted to see what kind of liquid

Runs through your veins…

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Short.Nerd]

Very good! Keep up the good work

[Brook]

The idea behind this was pretty much striking. The comparison you made in the second stanza was interesting, and I would have never thought to use words like that to pass on such a message. It flowed nicely throughout and was meaningful. You did a good job conveying what you meant, I think.

I liked the way you ended this. It was abrupt and it was a little bit haunting, just the right mixture of the two. I admire the way you wrote this, as it was very smooth and nearly flawless.

Very good job, I'd like to see more of this! 95/100.

[M.Babu]

Blood is thicker than water
So they say
But there’s ‘a friend who sticks closer than a brother’
So is that a ‘water’ or a ‘blood’,
Or a watered-down ‘blood’
Or a bloodied-up ‘water’?
The complexity your simple wording carries is just too cheeky man! I have been awed at this poem and it has amused me immensely bro! How you came up with such a humoring poem and yet still manage to deliver a moral lesson is amazing to me in every sense! I would say that this is one of your greatest works but i'd be lying- you just have too many. This unique style of yours and approach to issues is always catching me offguard! Riveting poem...absolutely magnificent!!
Thanks for sharing this one- i hadn't seen it:)

[MiidniightSoul]

Simply beautiful. I really enjoyed this piece. It's powerful, logical and very well written. Simple but hides a deep meaning behind your words. Wonderful. Keep it up.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. We need water and blood to function. I like the logic of this poem. Old wise saying. "Keep your enemy close to be able to watch them. And your friends in your view." A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote