Butterfly

Ever been the Fly?

You’ve been changing

And so have I

We used to be bosom buddies;

Fast friends

But now you’ve changed

And you don’t know my name.

 

Remember when we used to hang out

Back when you were a maggot

Down in the rotten pith

Of that old tree in the garden?

Life was good back then

We’d play everyday

Life was so easy-

Haukuwa na pupa

Till you crept into that pupa

Now you don’t know my name.

 

Now you only consort

With roses and daisies

With lilies and poppies

’Cause you’re a beautiful butterfly

And I’m nothing but a fly

That you used to know back then-

Such a long time ago

That you don’t remember my name.

 

Hey, pretty butterfly…

Your wings are a canvas

Of delicate, intricate colour

Worked by a master painter-

You flit on the wind

With unmatched grace-

D’you remember me, an old friend,

From the tree in the garden?

Do  you? 

You stopped in your way

And looked at me bemusedly-

Just a fly, buzzing around-

With a graceful flap of your wing

You asked,

Without batting an antennae,

“Excuse me,

But do I know you from somewhere?”

 

 

Author's Note

opinions,please.

Reviews

[WordsAndVoices]

This is amazing writing. I love the similes, the whole poem is practically a simile!The fly is left alone when the butterfly goes off to do bigger, better things. I liked it when you ended each verse with a different version of saying 'now you don't know my name.' But you stopped doing that near the end. Also in the fourth verse, you didn't need so many dashes, it took away from the reading a bit. There's, grammatically,not much wrong with this piece, but the flow could be worked on slightly... keep up the writing!

[MiidniightSoul]

This is such an amazing poem. So beautiful and deep. It has a nice flow and a vivid imagery. You describe such an emotional scene. Many of us can relate to something like this. When an old friend, a loved one leaves from your life, it will never be the same again. Laughs, smiles, tears, it all becomes a forgotten memory inside your heart. It is painful when you meet someone from your past who you shared your secrets and worries and seems to be a stranger. Brilliant

[Nautili]

I enjoyed this because i know what it is like to have an emotional betrayal from a friend. in think of them as "seasonal friends'". Some friends last a lifetime and some, for whatever reasons, last only for a season or two. it helps me accept the pain that comes from rejection of an old friend, and when I think of it, I have pulled away from old friends as well.
Nice write. Keep writing, yo have a gift.

[Short.Nerd]

I agree this was an amzazing write. It haad a nice flow. Great job!