"When Skies Are Grey(The Sunshine Song)"

A song I wrote for Lisa. I hope it explains a little of our story to you.

The other night dear, while I lay sleeping

I dreamt I held you in my arms.

When I awoke love, I was mistaken.

So I hung my head, and I cried.

 

Where did today go?

 

I've been trying to find a way love,

To say "I'm sorry" without the words.

It's just a song dear, but I'm hoping

It'll heal at least a little of the hurt.

 

Where'd that sunshine go?

 

You are my sunshine, my only sunshine

You make me happy when skies are grey.

You'll never know dear, how much I love you.

Please don't take my sunshine away.

 

I've been thinking something lately,

That if I've got you everday...

What's my excuse then, what's my problem?

Why are any days grey in the first place?

 

 

Author's Note

Sung to the classic tune (mostly).

Reviews

[Dawn Jones]

Ya know I downloaded that song and added it to my itunes last night. Interesting interpretation of the song and it's meaning. I like how you combine it with your own feelings, but I, personally, think that you can go far deeper into your own emotion. I think that the things you say, especially in the last few lines are lacking some spark that I'm pretty sure you could give it if you dug deep enough. You've got a lot of talent. I like reading your work... but I think everyone, a lot of writers, are afraid to hit that dark nerve that really digs into wounds. I suspect there is a wound here somewhere. Embrace it. Dig into it. And this poem will be amazing.

Be careful using so many lines of an already popular song in your work.

Thank you for sharing.

[Liza]

this write is a turn on of the heart

[Kia-chan!]

This is a very sweet poem/song. Very good, and romantic. I enjoyed it :)

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

I liked reading it..:)

[Adelia Alighieri]

Aww, this is sooo beautiful! :) I lovee poems that are simple, meaningful and make the readers understand easily what the poet wants to say. This one fulfills the criteria :)

[Cassi M.]

Wow this piece is beautiful. I sang it outloud just to hear what it sounded like and it was very nice. A sweet song:)

[Ladysue]

I love that song...nicely done...

[Crazy Cat Man]

very nicec lyrics

[TadKent]

heads up for those who don't know, It's not a copyright infringement if I'm "covering" and writing my own lyrics. Since classic lyrics only comprise a little less than half of the piece, it's legal.

I did my homework .:)
Good reviews though.

[Miss Coral]

Wonderful original song, and wonderful piece right here. Great job. :)
I would suggest, however, putting the classic's lines in quotation marks, seeing as some people can extreeemely sensitive to copyright technicalities.

[c.m.]

I love the classic song...and this is great work.