The Sea

You look in my eyes and I can't hide,
That's where my secrets hide, where my demons lie
I can't do this anymore
Left shattered on the oceans shore
I have a love for the sea
It is a part of me
You have a disgust for the sea
And therefore a disgust for me.
There is nothing I can do
As you look right through.
I'll never be what you want
My heart you will forever haunt
Pain sadness weighing me down
Slowly I wait for me to drown

Reviews

[songstress]

Absolutely beautiful...your name suits you serenity, though this piece is dark and tragic it's rather serene in it's fluidity.

Like traversing a desolate city lain in sand, on sunrise. The scene is shattering, yet with the rise of a new day there is something awaiting on the other end.

pain and sadness may weigh you down in this piece, but I feel that like we wait for the sun to rise we wait for the signal to start. Be it an end to suffering or a beginning to it I love this piece.

You have a way with words, and I love how even though you are brief you are descriptive. the contrasts between being hated and liking are brilliant, and the rhyme makes the piece all the more charming.

[Serenity]

Thank you so much for the review :) it means so much for me, I greatly appreciate it, let me know if there is anyway for me to return the favor :3

[MARK JOHN JUNOR]

fluently penned...brilliant and beautiful...id rate it a million out of a hundred but it wont let me