Internal Music

I was told to write something happy...

The music that lives, 

Within the soul,

As precious as, 

A mothers hold,

A child somewhere, 

Was born today,

Her love and happy, 

There to stay,

Forever more, 

The music will play,

And forever within, 

Her residence stay 

Making her smile, 

Every day.

Reviews

[aLittlePain]

This is simple elegance and poetically penned. The brevity of the piece captures perfectly magnitude of one of life's miracles, I also love that you drew the music analogy out, underlying the piece. The best part of me is a momma to a wee man, so this is deeply felt! Well done. Regards Ray

[Taz]

Thank You. I am glad it spoke to you.

[Joey Nizz]

This poem is just so well made with so much creativity.

This was a good read.

[Taz]

Wow thank you.

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome ^^

[The Exiled Wolf]

This is a delighting piece. A simple story, a simple poem and a simple thought are woven into a piece of lovely artwork. Just one thing - some commas can be removed to make the rhythm smoother!

[Taz]

Thank you for the advice but I put them there to seperate each syllable properly.

[The Exiled Wolf]

Lol that's totally fine:) I agree that they are good indicators for intentional pauses when reading this out loud!

[Taz]

Thank you.

[OneAmongstMany]

Really beautiful, keep it up!

[Taz]

Thank You.

[MarkAndTheOcean]

Very lovely poem. Keep it up! Alberta strong :D

[Taz]

lol will do.

[Andrea Megan Kelly]

This is absolutely beautiful!

[Taz]

Thank you!

[Hebe]

Hi Taz, thank you for your friend request. A very simple and beautiful write about the most precious moments in life!

[Taz]

Thnk you for accepting and reviewing my work. I am happy you liked it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nicely done.....it is harder for poets to write happy, isn't it.

but made that true connection between mother and child...and the music only the two can hear---as they shadow each other's beat.

j.

[Taz]

I am glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful use of words. I like the feel of happiness and thankfulness in the words. Thank you Taz for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Taz]

Thanks for reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Taz.

[Prototato]

I love it. It brings the mildest nostalgia with the thought put into the poem, and it also gives me a sense of security and rememberance. Well done! ^^