The Evil

Writing it to get it out of my mind.

Here he comes, behind me now,
I try to hide, I huddle down,
To get away from him but how?
I curl up, my head I bow,
But it's too late, cause I am found,
By Evil
He lifts me up, with his huge hands,
He breaks my will now, as he lands,
The pain inside me, nothing new,
It's not the first time, yes it's true,
No one can help me, I am through,
As I am hurt by,
The Evil.

Reviews

[heartspeaks]

This was ...i am dumbfounded.. i can't tell its beautiful or amazing cause i am still caught up with the strong emotion of the poem. The pain , the fright , the tearing of soul and the character consumed in pain and its agony is making it feel alive , as if i am the character. Kudos to you. You must have gone through something tough and i hope the weight is lifted off your chest. Keep smiling and stay strong. You are a prolific writer. All the best dear. I am just unable to stop myself from continuing the review. hahaha...

[Taz]

lol thank you!

[Stacy Purvis]

I've known such evil in this lifetime, perhaps, even more.
Recognition is everything. Wonderful piece.

[Taz]

Thank you so much. It really is sad how so many can relate.

[Jennifer]

I feel this poem on a really deep and emotional level it reminds me of when I was at my lowest. Thankyou so much for sharing it

[Taz]

I am glad you could relate and get something out of it.

[LKBillips]

Good rhythm and beat to it. Seems like it could be the start of a longer poem. Good stuff!!!

[Taz]

Thank you.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

I'm fascinated by the way you write. It seems to flow out of you, like you're the channel. Like you said, "writing to get it out of your mind". You make the rhymes effortlessly, and as someone who also plays with rhymed poetry here and there, I appreciate it. I look forward to more expressions from you. You have a full mind teeming with creativity.

[Taz]

Thank you so much. That is very kind of you to say. :)

[Sammie Sanchez]

nicely done, very deep yet short. i've felt this before so it's well written.

[Taz]

Thank You, I appriciate it.

[matrixmark]

This was such a great, great piece on evil. The first few words you used really had me hooked. I had visions of some dak shadow casting itselfs over a person,much like you see in the movies. The images were really quite vivid and even though the piece was short, it was electrically charged with powerful vivid images,

Mark.

[Taz]

Thank you, and I must say, those images are alot more scary in real life.

[matrixmark]

Very true. I can't disagree with that.

Mark.

[Prototato]

Wow.
I felt like someone who was re-experiencing evil. Truly well-put.

[Taz]

Thank you.

[CAPOLAVORO]

This one is good. You do know how to write the exact words and connect it into reality. Keep writing. :)

[Taz]

Sadly for some, this is reality.

[Najam Us Saher]

Somethings in life are such, no matter how hard we try to hide ourself from they haunt us down. This fact was truly carried out in your poem. I truly liked it. It gives a broader meaning to inevitable.