Autumn

And it started as normal,

with a text and a sadness.

And I met you with hope 

that I would make it better. 

And you didn't know it yet...

And you asked me to run away 

and spend the day with you. 

and forget all our troubles 

away from the devils 

that sent us both hate. 

And you didn't know it yet...

And we went to the park 

and we played on the swings 

and no one else mattered but us. 

We carved our names on a tree 

And climbed up high 

And you didn't know it yet... 

And we ran to your house 

and our hearts raced,

as we hid from your mother 

so she didn't know we'd escaped. 

And we spent the day together.

and you didn't know it yet... 

And then we walked in the rain,

and I thought you were mad,

and you grabbed my face 

and told me not to be sad.

And we bought cookies for fun 

and we looked all over town. 

And you didn't know it yet... 

And I saw your new scars 

and my heart dropped downwards.

I should have helped more. 

And I had you in my arms 

and we fell asleep like that.

And I dreamt of this day, 

and I hoped you had to. 

Because what you didn't know 

was that this was the best day 

anyone had ever had,

and I'm glad I spent it with you. 

Author's Note

All reviews welcome

Reviews

[Chris]

The form was rough but in a right way for what you wanted to bring out. There were several places - from the beginning where I initially thought you could do it better another way, or say it stronger or some other something... but after reaching the end... I wouldn't change a word.

I hope that helps. A whole lot of heart in this miss... You take care