Can I try to save you?

Can I try to save you?

A Poem by Katie Flores
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I want so much to hold you. To keep you save with me. To have you in another place will never do.

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I see the dead look in your eyes,
It screams, "I am not okay."
I see you, dying to fly,
But I know you've clipped your wings.

They fell to the ground,
Broken and tattered,
Their weight has lifted,
But you know they are the only thing that mattered.

You're stuck here,
Grounded.
The realization gives you fear,
But you can't cower and hide.

Have you given up on life,
And left your only promise behind?
Can I try to keep you safe from strife?
I know I can keep you, have you warm in my embrace.

I cannot say that you're weak,
You're dying to be set free.
And I'm dying to save you,
But who's going to save me?

Can I keep you safe from pain?
I want so much to try.
I can try to keep you sane,
Safe here, from any blame.

© 2012 Katie Flores


Author's Note

Katie Flores
So could you bring any grammatical errors to my notice? and whatdaya think?

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After reading your other work, this gets even more amazing to read...and the line, "But who's going to save me?" I was thinking of before it reached my eyes, meaning it made sense and was inevitable!
Many people hurt, but the courageous that can look then "see" their pain and its source, another thing entirely.
Courageous writer she is!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katie Flores

7 Years Ago

thanks for the words of understanding and praise :) they mean a lot novice writes like myself.



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After reading your other work, this gets even more amazing to read...and the line, "But who's going to save me?" I was thinking of before it reached my eyes, meaning it made sense and was inevitable!
Many people hurt, but the courageous that can look then "see" their pain and its source, another thing entirely.
Courageous writer she is!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katie Flores

7 Years Ago

thanks for the words of understanding and praise :) they mean a lot novice writes like myself.
It felt like the person was looking into a mirror and asking themself the questions.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Katie Flores

7 Years Ago

oh my, i just looked at this comment, and realized that this is exactly what happened... they to tal.. read more
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inspirational, elegant write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Katie Flores

8 Years Ago

Gahh! Thank you! I really respect your opinion, Neva :)

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