Our Little Secret

People say I should let it go.
It's all in the past, so I should put it behind me.
But no.
I want you to wrap around me.
And trace me with your fingertips...


If you can be my shadow,
What happens in the day?
If you can whisper into my ears
Why can't I speak them out loud?

You shush me,
You soothe me.
Then why are your hands so cold?

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.......

Let the humming never stop...
It's OK baby
Our love can stay a secret.

Reviews

If the two in this poem need to be together when it's a secret or not, their love shall shine... what a beautiful poem...

"
If you can be my shadow,
What happens in the day?
If you can whisper into my ears
Why can't I speak them out loud?"

Such a vivid imagery Siren.
Nice work.

E.L.

[Tree]

There are secrets between some lovers that can fill a book, storyline a dozen movies or fill the memory of an Ipod with music; maybe even a gentle stream, with some tears. I enjoyed this.

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you for the lovely review :)

[The Nude Writer]

What was your inspiration here? Really powerful poem :)

[Blue Ivory]

I don't really know...Sometimes I sorta get into a trance and then I write down everything I'm thinking

[The Nude Writer]

I do the same. Nothing wrong with that :)

[Ahmad Cox]

I love the sensual play of words and subtle use of metaphors.

[Hamza]

priceless ..
and i can tell you what it takes to keep that emotion deep down, covered up ..
because people around won't let it survive ...
there's a lot that empty eyes can say than a mouthful of words ..

[Blue Ivory]

You're right.

[UnderCompulsion]

It's cute I like it.Even thought the flow of your thoughts it is not so clear to me but I still like it.I always write a song with empty mind.So I know how it is.All in all interesting poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. I like the way you use the language. Create mystery and thoughts with your short statements. The poem felt like a whisper of secrets not to be told. No weakness in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you!

[amarlaksh]

Well Don't you think you started it like you are describing your feelings and then abruptly the last two lines. Although i did liked it

[Blue Ivory]

Honestly, I have no idea what I was thinking about when I wrote this :P That happens to me sometimes...I just randomly picture things and then write down whatever comes to mind, and then my work turns out a little choppy :/ Thanks for pointing it out! I appreciate criticism C:

[Leigh]

Is this shadowy love real or just a fantasy? I like the exciting atmosphere you've been able to create in this short piece and the unknowing that goes with it.

[Blue Ivory]

It's just a fantasy. And thank you!

[Infinite hexes]

Ok I'll be honest with you, I kind of don't understand this poem, like who are you talking about? But in general, you made a nice presentation( as always), and yeah the urgh to just say warm forever- its a good write