Stop and Go

Come and Go. Stop and Wait.

in life i see a stair.
each one of us has a choice.
to go up.
to stay down.
or hang in the middle.
each step is like a level game.
the higher you climb, the higher the challenge.
in life society will judge.
challenges to face.
and treasure to keep or leave.
at the bottom are those who have no will.
they expect an easier way to climb.
when life is about how, why, when, where, what, which and who.
how, is the act.
why, is the reason.
when, is the time.
where, is the place
what, is the form.
which, is the possibilities.
and who, are the players of the game.
alot of object can define another.
money, waterfall, stairs and more.
money, hard to earn yet easy to lose. losing is easy, winning is hard.
waterfall, continious water falls strong and steady yet may stop falling in time.
the will of others in certain challenges they face. rooted and strong or break and fall.
stairs, going up and going down. either move on or fall back.
things come and go, wanting to be chase.
or they stop and wait, waiting for something to come.
but not everthing is what you expect them to be.
nor when,where and how.
these things that will make stories, to enjoy, learn remember and share.
whatever you wrote is what you make.
- TheSearcher

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

"Come and Go. Stop and Wait." --So powerful start of this piece.

However, I have few suggestions for improvement, Kabayan:
*"which, is the possibilities." ---are the possibilities or is the possibility
*whatever you wrote is what you make."---write (to be parallel with make)
*Be careful in using punctuation marks. You need not to put a period in each end of line.
Hope not to offend but just trying to help...

When it comes to concept and word choice, this is already a fine piece. The rhythm is excellent. With few revisions for improvement, this will be an amazing poem!

[TheSearcher]

I would be offended if I am reading this once I wake up which is what I am doing now but I started to think straight. Anyway thnks for suggestion. Will edit in the future unless I forgot or to lazy to do so. :D

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome. I always wanted to help as it is the reason why a piece is reviewed...not just to flatter to get the same flattery in return. Lol
Happy writing!

[Sami Khalil]

"hard to earn yet easy to lose. losing is easy, winning is hard.
waterfall, continuous water falls strong and steady yet may stop falling in time. "

A splendid read and write. Bravo

[TheSearcher]

Thnk You for the time of you review of my poem.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)..........................