LUB DUB

LUB DUB

A Poem by DIVYA
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The heart persists...

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Another one bites the dust 

shot straight through the heart

Fate sealed, before he hit the ground

He did try to dodge the fatal bullet

but the sniper aimed only too well

He lies there bleeding insensate

vital blood, trickling stealthily

from the  gaping, mortal wound

to enrich the parched brown earth 

colouring it a deep, profane red

Yet a nerve in his neck still throbs 

as the ruptured heart fights to beat on

Struggling  valiantly for a time 

to reclaim its natural right to 

the rhythm of life and all its symphonies

Yet, trapped in that mangled cage

with its perforated valves and veins

its daunting will is of no avail

as it pulses and wobbles  in vain

fast draining of blood and hope 

till its time to yield  to the  ice-cold 

and witch-like  clutch of death

With one final swell and fall

it spills all within and stills

letting all things worldly go...

And another heart bites the dust 

© 2020 DIVYA


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DIVYA
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An interesting write!

Your poem could be interpreted in many different allegorical ways; from simply being as it is described; taking a sniper's bullet to the heart, or as the poet herself laying waste to another unwanted admirer....whatever your meaning, your words hit their target much like the sniper's shot itself.

This is a fine return to your free verse style of old; it flows like a descriptive outpouring of unhindered thought and its words and theme are very powerful, so well done on this one. The writes are flowing with more regularity and that is wonderful to see. Nicely written and conceived. 🌷🌷

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you sweetheart poet... I punched the starting line and the rest just flowed. I didn’t interr.. read more
Doodley

3 Weeks Ago

You are always welcome to my thoughts. Keep the writing flowing. 🌷🌷



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Very interesting and intriguing write.

I do like the color of font you chose to further engage the reader.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating, Nefertiti....
love the allegory here...and the allusions in the first two lines to Queen and Bryan Adams.

I think the heart's veins bleed more profusely in figurative manner, even more so than literally.
But I like how the subject here fights so hard to survive....just as we sometimes try to stop the bleeding in a relationship....with as many bandages as we can. And when the relationship is on its dying breath...
we don't "go gentle into that goodnight"---
excellent poem.
j.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Indeed Jacob...the denial persists...and the desperation too...long after its all gone...
Tha.. read more
A powerful write DIVYA and I saw this unfold in slow motion which had an even greater impact. I didn't see the sniper, I saw only the victim, a soldier in his combat gear, in a foreign land so far away from all that he loved. Doing his duty and succumbing in the process. The struggle for survival was painful to watch. My own heart took a hit, as I witnessed another one biting the dust. Vivid imagery.

On a lighter note I hear Freddie Mercury singing.

A great little piece of free verse dear poet.

Chris

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

A dying heart leaves so much unfinished...indeed a painful thing...
Thank you for your precio.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

2 Weeks Ago

You are very welcome and it is my pleasure dear poet.
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On one level, this could be a war or crime story, but I wonder if the poet is really trying to comment on the wounds the human spirit incurs in the course of a life. There are psychic wounds and there ar psychic wounds, but some are much worse than others, and they may come from unexpected sources. These can be the worst of all, causing the heart to give up. All worldly things are let go. Of course, great religious transformations have come out of these dark nights of the soul. That is about the only upside to such experiences.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

You got me so right John...I was mostly pitying the sturdy, faithful heart...It almost always wants .. read more
very nicely done
That most poeticized of all the human organs done in an original manner
and a write that keeps the reader fully involved
Seems to be more than a few biting the dust these days.
Wonder if the too convenient location has any bearing on that

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Yes Dave...now that you mention that...it's strategic location...that makes it so exposed and vulner.. read more
A terrifically grim poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MomzillaNC

2 Weeks Ago

No… sometimes, a heart can shine. I speak from experience.
DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

May it happen more often....
MomzillaNC

2 Weeks Ago

May it happen for you
OH MY! This is so graphic and so powerful, Divya. Not sure if you mean this as a metaphor for a broken heart or if this is truly a soldier dying on the field. In either case, the imagery is so real....so hard hitting! Wonderful poetry. Lydi**

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Indeed...the heart tries to persist in both physical trauma as well as in heartbreak...Thank you so .. read more
A shooting death starkly and poetically portrayed.
Packs a definite wallop, DIVYA.
Nicely done!


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you Jimmy...just applauding the heart :)
You've hit space with your words, Divvya - loudly, clearly! Seems whatever hurts or bewilders... both together even worse, calls for reaction, a stand up and be counted, showing courage in the face of physical or spiritual attack. You really do have a way of turning tables in a colourful yet academic way.. good for you, petal.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for appreciating this little effort of mine emmajoy... I'm so happy, you visited :)
emmajoy

3 Weeks Ago

More than a little effort,, far more! :)
DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

:)...........
The roads are littered with the corpses of divvy’s unrequited lovers hearts:) I’m pretty sure you threw me a couple of bullets over the years with your verses:/ nice free styling kitty needs to learn to not play with her prey to long tho and give a merciful kill shot once in a while:)

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Awww...now you have me blushing dear Bunny! Hahaha! Those bullets were meant to kill you nicely coz .. read more

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Added on January 4, 2020
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