Let someone else make the tea

Let someone else make the tea

A Poem by Beatrice Mars

Oh look at me,

I got the world

Around my neck

And it's just swinging there like

A pretty little stone

On the beach.

 

Oh look at me,

I've got the world,

And it's just swinging there

Like a noose

Around my neck,

Making me do the right thing.

© 2010 Beatrice Mars


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Beatrice Mars
SORRY CLAIRE!!!!

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:D LOVE THIS MUCHOS. both stanzas. though even I prefer the first ;) xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Posted 9 Years Ago


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i do like this lots and lots and lots, the rhythm is brilliant and there's something about your words that create a really good image to me "and it's just swinging there like a pretty little stone on the beach". i didn't like the whole noose thing, just beacuse i don't want it to be a noose because beth, i quite like you :P but haha it's still really good imagery and it's a brilliant poem. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


lush first stanza but whats with the 2nd one,hmm? way to turn a happy poem into one about DEATH :P

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Beatrice Mars
Beatrice Mars

United Kingdom



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I'm an 19 year old girl. Of all the souls that stand create I have elected one. When sense from spirit files away, And subterfuge is done; When that which is and that which was Apart, intr.. more..

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