Words

Words

A Poem by Thorn
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A poem about how much words really mean.

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I lay my heart out here before you,

I place it on this glowing screen,

So that you may come to see me

In a way so few have seen.

The words that swirled inside my head,

Just begging to pour out,

Now lie down here before your eyes,

My soul, my greatest gift.

 

 

 

© 2009 Thorn


Author's Note

Thorn
Eww...the last line doesn't feel right.
But I'm reasonably pleased with the rest ^^
EDIT: I changed the last line a little. Please tell me what you think!

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Yeah it was really nice until the last line blocked the flow.. like a clogged artery o-o;

Posted 11 Years Ago


Over all, this is a beautiful poem about the meaning of words,
you got it down well, as for the last line, it doesn't flow perfect
but it is a very good ending to the poem so I think that makes it
work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yeah, I agree. I thought it was wonderful, and the last line is just wondeful!!! Keep it up.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked it, keep up the good work

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Thorn

A city with roads in it, New Zealand



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I'm Thorn. I like sushi, and my pet axolotl, Mexie. I enjoy sailing, writing, and acting. And playing my flute. ^^ I dislike maths, trying to memorise Shakespeare, and being wrong. But I love my c.. more..

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