Mt. Saint Helens

Senryu

on the horizon
a volcano now awake
shadowing Portland*






*Portland, Oregon

Reviews

[Tony]

Like it's ready to pounce-- kinda eerie. I'd like to offer briefly how this senryu made feel-- like a person who has been dormant then something happens where they feel awake and then they are feeling ready to do some serious buisness on the town and it's coming soon you know like the horizen is the near future-- and like the name of the town "Portland" is going to do just that be an import town for some major stuff. So you got this person plotting looking at the city. You know with all the power of a volcanoe inside of them. You know like feeling really alive and awake. Just thought I'd share how the poem moved me. Excellent use of the senryu form.

Makosica

[Morning Star]

WOW that is a huge volcano
But it is a beautiful mountain yet scary !!
Awesome picture
hope your Christmas and New Year was filled with joyful blessings

[Zoe Jay]

Short but to the point, a this type of poetry should be. It has a feeling of ominousness, looming, which is very well portrayed in a few short words. The sounds are quite harsh and discordant, like the rumble of distant trouble.... excellent.

[Ladysue]

Great picture for this intriguing haiku. this made me think of an eruption rising...fantastically done..

[Art]

that's a huge volcano....I sure wouldn't want to be around when that blows...nice work on this senryu

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Very descriptive and expressive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read this afternoon...Thank you for reviewing my work..Your kind remarks lifted my spirits..Sunflower

[Jenny Nelson]

Awesome photo and fantastic write. Fits perfectly.

[Desert Dreamer]

A powerful combination of words and photo. The volcano image reinforces the meanings found in this poem...I feel the past, present and future in these few words.

[Eric Cox]

Spooky image created. Nicely penned.

[Frantzuu]

You live in Portland??????/ That's awesome!! I've been down there a few time, the coast is gorgeous there. Great poem though :)
I live in Washington by the way.

[Coyote Poetry]

it is very beautiful and scary at the same time. Thank you for the photo. It is outstanding.
Coyote