Ode to a Fair Lady

Where the heart is ensnared, the mind must subjugate eventually. For there is no such love as the fiery one which I possess, which threatens to consume me, but which is caressed by my burnt fingers.

Her hair is as shiny as the moon reflected off the Thames
Her eyes little obsidian tunnels
That would burn with passion
Or flash with anger
Signaling danger through
That fragile, porcelain-like face
Her eyebrows
which would make any man's heart pace
Two strands of loveliness
I love to hear her speak, for I know
Between her parted scarlet lips
The very music of Heaven sows
Dear, I ask her , be you not from the Heavens itself
To which she blushes,
And gliding over,
Plants a marvelous, heartwrenching kiss on my cheek
Putting me in a right ol' hangover
Sending a jolt between my heart
And my nether regions
Wait! I cry
Do not leave me
In torment
For I am in need
Unmask this charade O' fair one
And as the sun goes down
And the flame of my love burns bright
In the night
I know two things are eternal
The sun, the moon, the stars, and
My love for my Fair lady

Author's Note

Hi there! Please do have a read and review if you have ever found yourself besotted by that SPECIAL SOMEONE! *wink*

Reviews

[ANTO]

I love the start and end references to London (Thames) and My fair Lady - the movie/musical version of Pygmalion.
I also like the old fashioned writing style which harks back to that era also - the era of gentlemen laying cloaks in puddles for ladies.
Some truly beautiful lines here Tks -

I would consider reworking this section:
"I know two things are eternal
The sun, the moon, the stars, and
My love for my Fair lady" - to perhaps consider whether to keep the word 'two' - you would thus make the sun,moon and stars into one collection - i.e.' the celestial bodies 'or delete the word 'two' and say "I know these things are eternal -" and keep the original list (of 4 things) - I hope you dont think Im being pedantic Tks - its just that this was the only snag for me in this otherwise delightful write. Thanks for the friend request btw. :))

[Tks]

Hey ANTO, thanks for the excellent review! Hahaha no worries my friend, you are not being pedantic, I appreciate every single review I receive...each is special to me, and helps me grow! Thank you for stopping by, hope to review some of your newer works soon!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"all i want is a room somewhere, far away from the cold night air"---but definitely "on the street where you live"

love it.

[B]

So gorgeous oh my lol

i love it

[Tks]

*bows* thank you Nisreen! :)

[B]

There is more
i just haven't placed a finger on it
there is something i see here

[B]

This is imagination
right
it seems like this person is not with you
you imagined this
i dunno

[anne]

I know two things are eternal
The sun, the moon, the stars, and
My love for my Fair lady ..
dripped on beautiful emotions..:))

[Tks]

Thank you Anne:) your reviews are very kind. Have a good day ahead!

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful poetry for the fair lady.
"The sun, the moon, the stars, and
My love for my Fair lady"
Donne and Ben Jonson would be honored by the above words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tks]

Hey Coyote, thanks for dropping by, mate! Have a good day ahead!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Lavender Soya]

I'm sorry it took me a while to read this wonderful piece. It's magnificent my friend! A lyrical poem, that's what this is. :-)

[Tks]

Thank you Lavender Soya! Have an awesome day ahead! :)

[Lavender Soya]

You're welcome :-)

[Roshan Nair]

thats some fair lady you encountered man. Great descriptions and metaphors to convey the beauty of her outer and inner being. Really liked the character the poem gave her.
Cheers! :)

[Tks]

Hey Roshan, thanks for stopping by:) thank you for your kind review, have a good day ahead!

[Cool Girl]

Gosh, this reminds me of my old love.. Oh those good old days:)
Sweet poem! It was absolutely beautiful. It really captured the emotions of a budding relationship..

[Tks]

:) thank you so much for dropping by, Cool Girl. Have a good day ahead!

[Cool Girl]

You're very welcome :)

[dan]

Tks, A very beautiful and moving love poem. Eloquent and deliberate, this leaves little doubt about what your true feelings are. Can I point out one little flaw? In the last few lines, you say, "I know two things are eternal," and then you name four things. Just a little tweak needed, no biggie. Otherwise it's a very dear write. Be proud of it! take care...dan

[Tks]

Hey dan, thank you for stopping by, and for your kind words:) have a good day ahead!

[Ishita Dixit]

This is so beautiful!
My Fair Lady...sorry, Your Fair Lady sounds quite beautiful. I almost had a girl crush on her! :P
Jokes apart, the writing style kept me captivated right from the inception.
I loved it!

[~]

A lovely and delicate write Tks. She's painted eloquently. And seems like a damsel that's put you in deep distress. :) thanks for sharing it with me. I liked it.

[Tks]

Yes, she has indeed, moonskittles:) Thank you for your kind words, and have a great day ahead!