Ode to a Fair Lady

Where the heart is ensnared, the mind must subjugate eventually. For there is no such love as the fiery one which I possess, which threatens to consume me, but which is caressed by my burnt fingers.

Her hair is as shiny as the moon reflected off the Thames
Her eyes little obsidian tunnels
That would burn with passion
Or flash with anger
Signaling danger through
That fragile, porcelain-like face
Her eyebrows
which would make any man's heart pace
Two strands of loveliness
I love to hear her speak, for I know
Between her parted scarlet lips
The very music of Heaven sows
Dear, I ask her , be you not from the Heavens itself
To which she blushes,
And gliding over,
Plants a marvelous, heartwrenching kiss on my cheek
Putting me in a right ol' hangover
Sending a jolt between my heart
And my nether regions
Wait! I cry
Do not leave me
In torment
For I am in need
Unmask this charade O' fair one
And as the sun goes down
And the flame of my love burns bright
In the night
I know two things are eternal
The sun, the moon, the stars, and
My love for my Fair lady

Author's Note

Hi there! Please do have a read and review if you have ever found yourself besotted by that SPECIAL SOMEONE! *wink*

Reviews

[ANTO]

I love the start and end references to London (Thames) and My fair Lady - the movie/musical version of Pygmalion.
I also like the old fashioned writing style which harks back to that era also - the era of gentlemen laying cloaks in puddles for ladies.
Some truly beautiful lines here Tks -

I would consider reworking this section:
"I know two things are eternal
The sun, the moon, the stars, and
My love for my Fair lady" - to perhaps consider whether to keep the word 'two' - you would thus make the sun,moon and stars into one collection - i.e.' the celestial bodies 'or delete the word 'two' and say "I know these things are eternal -" and keep the original list (of 4 things) - I hope you dont think Im being pedantic Tks - its just that this was the only snag for me in this otherwise delightful write. Thanks for the friend request btw. :))

[Tks]

Hey ANTO, thanks for the excellent review! Hahaha no worries my friend, you are not being pedantic, I appreciate every single review I receive...each is special to me, and helps me grow! Thank you for stopping by, hope to review some of your newer works soon!

[AaronFreitas]

Very nice work Tks. Obvious strong feeling for that special someone and you could feel it with your words. Great poem.

[Tks]

Indeed, Aaron:) .Thank you for stopping by, have a good day ahead!

[Sumit Datta]

This is written with great feelings for someone very special.

[Tks]

Thank you so much for dropping by, Sumit :)

[Afraa]

Whoever you wrote this for is one lucky lady! The title completely drew me in, but the words were the final blow for me. I cannot tell you how gorgeous these words are. It is amazing how much power is held behind words. My favorite part of a poem is the descriptive language, and this one has plenty of it. Definitely a piece that will be shelved into my favorites. I could say more, but I would have wrote a novel! :P

Beautifully written!

[Tks]

Gosh Afraa, thank you so much! It is an honor to be reviewed by a great writer like yourself, and your kind words made my day! Have an awesome day ahead:)

[Afraa]

You're very welcome. Right back at you!

[Mary Bradley]

Lovely poem ! I feel your passions for the fair lady ... honest and sweet :-)

[Tks]

Thank you Ms Mary:) have a lovely day ahead!

[Mary Bradley]

Thanks :-) yourself as well !