Wow

A beautiful woman

She sells

mascara 

with eyes 

attached

Smokey dilations;

stealing third base

Pastel backdrops 

to Never

Neverland

Brushing all aside

Huge lashes

Drawing 

digits aside

Uma Thurman-like

Pulping out fiction

In pants so tight

You can see

her 

pulse

Men cry;

cry themselves 

to sleep

- her in mind.

Author's Note

captcha shocker !! lol

Reviews

[Alisa Js]

Hello Tony,

Some women are to die for... while this is true, there are some absolutely beautiful men out there that have the same effect on women.

And by beautiful, I mean so beautifully handsome... you just have to stop and stare...

I enjoyed this one...

Wishing you well.

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

So true Alisa - sauce for the goose...
Thank you for your wee visit - always welcome
:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words and thoughts. You create siren, need and temptation using so few words. Thank you Tony for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Manu]

Beautiful poem on beautiful Woman...
Smoothly written, Tony.
Beauty evokes joy ..this did the same.
Fine one!

[Tony Jordan]

Thanks Gorthi - I agree beauty does evoke joy but in some it also sparks the envy monster, sadly.read moreThanks Gorthi - I agree beauty does evoke joy but in some it also sparks the envy monster, sadly.
:)

[Alfred Kukitz]

Hoota Hotta! It's all I can say!

Regards,
Al

[Tony Jordan]

I'll take 'Hoota Hotta' all day long Al, thank you very much
:))

[Michael Makfinsky]

The protagonist is begging for interaction. There must be a rejoinder poem to follow in which the action will take place somewhere - outside of her mind?

[Tony Jordan]

Maybe she's the woman in the poem I wrote after this one then Michael entitled 'Tibialoconcupiscent'
You have me questioning myself now - love that in a review. Thank you so much !!

[BBP]

I'm taking this as a vain women's mindset of herself.... ?

[Tony Jordan]

Thanks Bev.
It began as an homage to the woman in the poem then morphed into something quite accusatory and condemning - didn't mean it that way - I guess it says a lot about me.
Thank you for reviewing and commenting Bev.
I appreciate your thoughts.
:)

[Poetic License]

Oh my.... I should say you titled this work appropriately. I do love a poem that sends me right back to the beginning each time I finish - eating up every last crumb. This was simply delicious. Well done.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you L.R.
I'm gob-smacked.
Love this review!
:)

[Rynn]

This piece is so very thoughtful. It leaves me thinking that this is a woman who is very happy with herself; confident.

"Men cry;
cry themselves
to sleep

- her in mind." - This leads me to believe that, since it's in her own head, she believes that she is "killin it" and dropping them dead; very satisfied with how she looks. This is a really strong feature that not a whole lot of woman have these days and I cherish that, in my personal interpretation of this piece, she has the inner stability to be proud of herself

[Pete]

the downfall of many a man. can't live with 'em & can't live without 'em. nice job on this. many memorable lines and clever imagery. good flow. title sums up. :)

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you for the kind review Pete.
:)

[Bala Gorthi]

Wow factors!
I enjoyed the beauty of your descriptions. It is an interesting piece that keeps me intrigued.
Thanks for this write Tony.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Bala.
I appreciate your thoughts.
:)

[Eliee]

Beautiful work! While all you've described is her lashes and tight pants, I've gathered the image of a beautiful woman, perhaps one who is trying too hard to get those men to cry, seeing as how in the end, they're only crying in her mind. Wonderful piece!