Hyposnis

Hyposnis

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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Hippos kill 2,900 people in Africa each year (How do the hippos know when they've reached their quota each year is what I asked myself)

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With eyelashes fluttering in the swell
Those pretty eyes took me to hell
Rooted to the spot was I 
Eaten by hippo - what a cruel way to dieeeeeee.....

© 2017 Tony Jordan


Author's Note

Tony Jordan
Did you spot 'it' ?

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I think giving this all my considerable powers of response and review. Considering this from all the angles and looking into its fundamental use of language, simile and metaphor. Taking into consideration the subject and the ultimate unexpected denouement. With the natural history/zooological element as well. Thinking carefully about the romantic elements also.... I've got to say, taking all that into account and thinking about it hard. I've got to say....... your'e weird you are.

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

*sniffs* - Ken...
That's the nicest thing anybody has ever said to me...except me mum appare.. read more
Ken Simm.

4 Years Ago

Apropos the above words. written by me. Well those are my principles!. If you don't like them..... .. read more
Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Haha - speaking of inside things - it was the true story of a Safari guide who survived being inside.. read more



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I saw a video last week. I didn't know hippos were so dangerous. Nice use of words and thoughts. Perfect ending to the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


no ..i did not spot "it" ..only in your note sir .."Hyposnis" hmmmmmmmmmmmmm Hyp......o......snis! i love the hippo ..and revere their power and place in the pond ... they are left alone ... they eat the young ...cruel male bulls ... i don't like that ...when the hippo gets you...you are gone ..snapped in half in and instant .. all they want is to be left alone... like the Hells Angels ;) i don't know what to do with this poem ...i have to laugh but it is not a joke ..2900 peeps a year oh my :(( Tony! you need to stay away from the water ...OK!?
E.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Right so now E! I have a image of a hippo in leathers on a chopper wearing a WW2 german infantry hel.. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

chuckling all over again tony ..thanks :)))
mesmerized by those beautiful eyes

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Cheers Ron.
Don't get too close. Lol
Read below so I figure he was 2,901 so he spit him out. Not so clever on my part. just read below...Valentine

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Haha
Kathie your wit is razor-sharp lol @ "spit him out"
Thanks for the great craic
First of all you have a humor that all may not be ready for!! I actually enjoyed this for a few reasons. I did read the article you linked to this piece.
(Please all understand I'm not laughing at any one who has lost their lives to Hippo deaths.)
But the link you shared, after reading peeked my interest and I researched a few more articles.
So the reasons I enjoyed was because it takes the Hippo I think of from say cartoons and then exposes Him for who he apparently truely is. Also this piece although to me amusing shines light on a real issue here! I have been misinformed on Hippos!!!
I would be the one to approach the beast thinking it was a calm creature for a selfie. So this has been eye opening to me!
I loved the play on words too!
Very clever! And last but not least I learned something obviously stated above but to be commended! So...I say creative, amusing, but serious topic especially for those who live near hippos or go to visit them!!
Well done!!!
Tabby


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Tabby - you are too funny. I think the hippo would smile widely if you went up to it for a selfie - .. read more
wooh! thats it, You know how to surprise the reader

Posted 4 Years Ago


lol

I will take that this one is meant to be humorous...

If so, then the visuals are to die for!

lol

Thanks for the chuckle...

Alisa

Posted 4 Years Ago


This is a great four liner, Man!
Inspiring and thought-provoking.
Love the rhyme
Great one
:-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Have often wondered how dangerous hippos are; you rarely see them portrayed as primarily predators in most jungle movies.
I've also learned something quite helpful; Never look a hippo in its pretty eyes. You'll be hyposnisized!
Informative--and amusing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


I would like to say that your poem left me feeling quite crushed - but that would be hippocritical.
N.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

Hahah - well safari sagoodie then Norman
love it !! xD
Norman 223

4 Years Ago

Deep gratimoles , Professor.

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