Storm Release

Upon her violent visage

Scars of white froth emerge

Resembling rolling writhing worms

That decay and dissolve again

Into the brine and deepest depths

 

Charcoal clouds pregnant with

Pungent moisture

Release uncountable beads of pearls

To the howling winds; the mistress sea

Will not be subdued by this sacrifice

 

She swallows the downpour over

Swollen lips; it only empowers her

Frustration and fury

Neptune himself, if he pursued her

In an amorous embrace, would surely feel her wrath

 

Only time will be the salve to her wounds

Such as a woman when scorned

Must be given room to rage

Coming too close to energy like this before it has run its course

Will only prove disastrous,leading to any’s demise   

 

Reviews

[@zeewhykay]

wow, blown away !

The alliteration in the 1st paragraph is just simply fascinating. Scratch that, the alliteration in the whole piece is brilliant.

This really gave me hints of a women experiencing with giving birth. The intensity and fury is constant throughout.

"Coming too close to energy like this before it has run its course" and

"Charcoal clouds pregnant with

Pungent moisture

Release uncountable beads of pearls

To the howling winds; the mistress sea

Will not be subdued by this sacrifice "


Sincerely appreciated your poetic schemes !!

[deeps]

Wow! This is amazing, and powerful
full of emotion. A write very well written.

[Tate Morgan]

A sensuality in this

[Bette]

well done! i love it!

[Eagle Cruagh]

Dangerous as it is , this reader must
venture close to extend , again, my
congratulations and a well done .

When a lady ( or the sea) is aroused
we had better spread a little oil on
her to calm the fury that emanates
from the depths, a fury that can sink
mortal man in a flash.

Love this poem, but then I love all the
writing created by La Tigra.

----- Eagle Cruagh

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The last line doesn't make sense. The rest of the poem was quite nice with some great descriptions. "demise" means death...so what you have is "Will only prove disastrous to any's death" (doesn't make sense) Once we reach death, there are no more "disasters" or disastrous things to fear, we are dead, death being the ultimate disaster. If you had written, "Will only prove disastrous, leading to any’s demise" THAT would make sense. Logical progression is important to me...I am surprised no other reviewer mentioned that....or maybe not so surprised but I would advise changing it.

[Ed Hart]

I say, we sit over there on that large flat rock where the quieting sea can touch our toes, and we touch finger tips, and drink in the prana-rich air, and feel the soft pull of the warm sun on our faces, and, if we say anything, let it be nothing at all...

[Soul Magic✯]

awesome ink Tigra. the imagery in this piece is on point... very powerful piece. thanks for sharing this one with us... much luv

[Jenny Nelson]

Excellent, powerful piece!

"Only time will be the salve to her wounds
Such as a woman when scorned
Must be given room to rage
Coming too close to energy like this before it has run its course"
Will only prove disastrous to any’s demise"

I love those words. Such great description for both human and nature.

[Samuel Dickens]

Yikes! I'm familiar with both reality and the metaphor, and don't know which frightens me more.

[Arthur Henn]

Tigra (I love this) I can see this (Storm) This is a favorite of mine. The best That I have read of your poetry thus far. These words are set in the frame of verse and phrase with the arms of power.

Art